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In countries like Japan, the population is getting older, are the effects of aging population on society is negative or positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In countries like Japan, the population is getting older, are the effects of aging population on society is negative or positive. m15a8
The advancement in the medical, education and food sectors have surely allowed people to enjoy their lives for maximum years. Presently, it has been controversial that whether having older population has useful contribution in development of society or not. Here, this essay will account for both positive and negative sides with my perception. There are multifarious benefits of this phenomenon. First and foremost, the presence of aging population plays a phenomenal role to evolve moral skills, cultural values and supreme etiquettes among adolescents. As a result, a country produces noble you. . .
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positive
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There are multifarious benefits of this phenomenon.
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and foremost, the presence of aging population plays a phenomenal role to evolve moral
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skills
, cultural values and supreme
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etiquettes
among adolescents.
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, a country produces noble you.
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IELTS essay In countries like Japan, the population is getting older, are the effects of aging population on society is negative or positive.

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