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Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public is as annoying as smoking and should be banned, similarly to smoking. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience

Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public is as annoying as smoking and should be banned, similarly to smoking. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience kYjaO
. Mobile has become part and parcel of every one's life in this modern world. Presently, it is argued that mobile creates inconveniences at the public places. Therefore, it should be banned in order to develop better atmosphere at such places. Here, I would like to discord with given statement. There are manifold points to endorse my point of view. First and foremost, people are well educated, advanced and more disciplined who understand the importance of rules and other's comforts. As a result, they not only talk in low voice on cellphones but also keep them on vibration to avoid distur. . .
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Mobile has become part and parcel of every one's life in this modern world.
Presently
, it
is argued
that mobile creates inconveniences at the public places.
Therefore
, it should
be banned
in order to develop better atmosphere at such places. Here, I would like to discord with
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given
statement.

There are manifold points to endorse my point of view.
First
and foremost,
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people
are
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well educated
, advanced and more disciplined who understand the importance of
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rules
and other's comforts.
As a result
, they not
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only
talk in low voice on cellphones
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but
also
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keep
them on vibration to avoid
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distur
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public is as annoying as smoking and should be banned, similarly to smoking. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience

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103 words
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