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In contemporary era, products are being exchanged between different nations owing to globalization that has both upsides as well as downsides. Hence, this essay is an attempt of discussing proper impacts of globalization especially on developing nations.

In contemporary era, products are being exchanged between different nations owing to globalization that has both upsides as well as downsides. Hence, this essay is an attempt of discussing proper impacts of globalization especially on developing nations. BMoXw
On one hand, plethora of benefits are being invited by globalization in third world nations. The first and foremost is, availability of international product in that nation. For instance, in developing nations such as India and Pakistan, plenty of international fruits’ varieties such as Kiwi from New Zealand and Apple Red Delicious from the USA have been made available that is only possible by the means of globalization. Moreover, international food chains like Subway and McDonalds are providing lip-smacking and scrumptious meals to the people. The second cogent advantage is availability of floods of opportunities. To be more precise, Gurugram and Bengaluru are two cosmopolitan cities in India having abundance of Multinational companies such as Fujitsu General and Apple Inc. , that are not only providing international product to locals but also opening doors of jobs. As a result, globalization has become a platform that is providing money to the people of particular nation in order to make their both ends meet. On the other hand, this concept also has some unfriendly aspects. In the beginning, by this globalization, poor countries are also facing deleterious outcomes. In brief, the Covid-19 pandemic has plundered under developed nations too since this disease has gulped the entire world because of globalization. Additionally, local products are losing their charm against global ones. Least but not the least, this concept is also gulping local traditions, culture and languages. To conclude, in this revolutionized era, this is globalization that is enabling small nations to survive and I am of the opinion that its bright sides outweigh dark ones.
On one hand, plethora of benefits are
being invited
by globalization in third world
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nations
. The
first
and foremost is, availability of
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international
product in that
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nation
.
For instance
, in developing
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nations
such as India and Pakistan,
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plenty
of
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international
fruits’ varieties such as Kiwi from New Zealand and Apple Red Delicious from the USA have
been made
available
that is
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only
possible by the means of globalization.
Moreover
,
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international
food chains like Subway and
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McDonalds
are providing lip-smacking and scrumptious meals to the
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people
.

The second cogent advantage is availability of floods of opportunities. To be more precise,
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Gurugram
and Bengaluru are two cosmopolitan cities in India having abundance of Multinational
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companies
such as Fujitsu General and Apple Inc.
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,
that are not
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only
providing
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international
product to locals
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but
also
opening doors of jobs.
As a result
, globalization has become a platform
that is
providing money to the
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people
of particular
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nation
in order to
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make
their both ends
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meet
.

On the other hand
, this concept
also
has
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some
unfriendly
aspects. In the beginning, by this globalization, poor countries are
also
facing deleterious outcomes.
In brief
, the Covid-19 pandemic has plundered under developed
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nations
too since this disease has gulped the entire world
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because
of globalization.
Additionally
, local products are losing their charm against global
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ones
. Least
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but
not the least, this concept is
also
gulping local traditions, culture and languages.

To conclude
, in this revolutionized era, this is globalization
that is
enabling
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small
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nations
to
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survive and
I am of the opinion that its bright sides outweigh dark
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ones
.
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IELTS essay In contemporary era, products are being exchanged between different nations owing to globalization that has both upsides as well as downsides. Hence, this essay is an attempt of discussing proper impacts of globalization especially on developing nations.

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