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In class, you recently had a discussion about whether towns and cities should have more parks and green spaces. You have decided to write an article for your school magazine.Write an article for your school magazine, giving your views.

In class, you recently had a discussion about whether towns and cities should have more parks and green spaces. You have decided to write an article for your school magazine. Write an article for your school magazine, giving your views. QRddw
Would not you love to have more parks or green spaces that beautify the environment in the city? Green spaces are necessity not an amenity in a city, since they have gigantic positive effects on individuals who live in the neighborhood and they are an indispensable part of our lives. To begin with the greatest major merit for the green areas is promoting people’s mental and physical health. To put it differently, green fields help in lowering depression levels, stress alleviation and leading people to be more delighted and healthier. Secondly, one of the most serious and common hardships in cities is the increase of pollution either air pollution or any other kind of pollution, for this reason, adding more green spaces would be profitable in reducing the high levels of pollution as plants will work as filters for the toxic air pollutants. Consequently, the city will have a greater climate and moderate temperature. Apart from fostering the connection with nature, it drives people to be eco-friendly and more anxious about the environment; subsequently, can lead us to better human well-being. Not to mention the fact that they provide space for athletes to do exercise and for families to play or to gather on a picnic. In the final analysis, although, it might take some effort for truly bringing nature into the heart of the cities; nevertheless, green areas and parks are precious places that have to be cherished and extended.
Would not you
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love
to have more parks or
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green
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spaces
that beautify the environment in the city?
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Green
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spaces
are necessity not an amenity in a city, since they have gigantic
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positive
effects on individuals who
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live
in the
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neighborhood and
they are an indispensable part of our
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lives
.

To
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begin
with the greatest major merit for the
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green
areas is promoting
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people
’s mental and physical health. To put it
differently
,
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green
fields
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help
in lowering depression levels,
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stress
alleviation and leading
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people
to be more delighted and healthier.

Secondly
, one of the most serious and common hardships in
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cities
is the increase of
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pollution
either air
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pollution
or any other kind of
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pollution
,
for this reason
, adding more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
green
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spaces
would be profitable in reducing the high levels of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
as plants will work as filters for the toxic air pollutants.
Consequently
, the city will have a greater climate and moderate temperature.

Apart from fostering the connection with nature, it drives
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to be eco-friendly and more anxious about the environment;
subsequently
, can lead us to better human well-being. Not to mention the fact that they provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
for athletes to do exercise and for families to play or to gather on a picnic.

In the final analysis, although, it might take
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some
effort for
truly
bringing nature into the heart of the
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cities
;
nevertheless
,
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green
areas and parks are precious places that
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have to
be cherished
and extended.
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IELTS essay In class, you recently had a discussion about whether towns and cities should have more parks and green spaces. You have decided to write an article for your school magazine. Write an article for your school magazine, giving your views.

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