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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? GqP2
In this day and age, traffic congestion, which is caused by an enormous amount of vehicles, has become inevitable and more serious in each passing day. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem. There are many reasons for the massive number of vehicles, the most obvious of which is the overpopulation. Nowadays, rural people tend to migrate to more developed cities to get more job opportunities and a higher standard of living that both of which lead to overpopulation. To illustrate, there has been a huge difference between the population density in rural and urban areas - the areas of dense and sparse population respectively. As a result, the commuting demand in most of the metropolises has increased day by day. Another contributory factor is that people prefer to use the private vehicle over public transportation because of the poor quality of private vehicles. Personal vehicle distinguished from public transport by its convenience and flexibility. Using public transportation is extremely time-consuming. Whereas, if people commute by personal vehicle on a regular basis, an enormous amount of exhaust fumes and emission will be release and traffic jam will have no improvement. Initiatives can be taken to improve the situation. Firstly, commuters tend to travel to work simultaneously. Therefore, in order to ease congestion, we should change our working habits and government ought to encourage people to stay inside during rush hours. Secondly, the government needs to focus on developing the public transport system. Especially in developing countries, buses are definitely inadequte to respond to the demand of their citizens. The government might consider with regard to other public transport like bicycles. Developing the bicycle system all around the city will bring a lot of benefits to the people and the city itself. It is also safer for the environment and has positive effects on the riders’ health. In conclusion, worldwide cities and towns are facing pressing traffic issue these days due to the overpopulation and the huge amount of private vehicle. However, we can significantly curb traffic by changing our working habits and diversify public transportation.
In this day and age,
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traffic
congestion, which
is caused
by an enormous amount of
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vehicles
, has become inevitable and more serious in each passing day. There are a variety of possible reasons for this,
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but
steps can definitely
be taken
to tackle the problem.

There are
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many
reasons for the massive number of
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vehicles
, the most obvious of which is the overpopulation. Nowadays, rural
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people
tend to migrate to more developed
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cities
to
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get
more job opportunities and a higher standard of living that both of which lead to overpopulation. To illustrate, there has been a huge difference between the population density in rural and urban areas
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-
the areas of dense and sparse population
respectively
.
As a result
, the commuting demand in most of the metropolises has increased day by day. Another contributory factor is that
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people
prefer to
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use
the private
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vehicle
over
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public
transportation
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because
of the poor quality of private
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vehicles
. Personal
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vehicle
distinguished from
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public
transport by its convenience and flexibility. Using
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public
transportation is
extremely
time-consuming. Whereas, if
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people
commute by personal
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vehicle
on a regular basis, an enormous amount of exhaust fumes and emission will be release and
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traffic
jam will have no improvement.

Initiatives can
be taken
to
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improve
the situation.
Firstly
, commuters tend to travel to work
simultaneously
.
Therefore
, in order to
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ease
congestion, we should
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change
our working habits and
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government
ought to encourage
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people
to stay inside during rush hours.
Secondly
, the
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government
needs to focus on developing the
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public
transport system.
Especially
in
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developing countries
, buses are definitely
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inadequte
to respond to the demand of their citizens. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
might consider with regard to other
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public
transport like bicycles. Developing the bicycle system all around the city will bring
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a lot of
benefits to the
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people
and the city itself. It is
also
safer for the environment and has
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positive
effects on the riders’ health.

In conclusion
, worldwide
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cities
and towns are facing pressing
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traffic
issue these days due to the overpopulation and the huge amount of private
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vehicle
.
However
, we can
significantly
curb
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traffic
by changing our working habits and diversify
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation.
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IELTS essay In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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