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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? GRww
Today, in Britain and also all around the world, it is quite often for senior citizens to leave their homes, families, and prefer to live in nursing homes with other guest in similar conditions. These centres have various expenses due to medical inventory including special drugs required by patients, daily hygiene, nutritional necessities such as presenting fresh food three times a day. Such expenses need to be paid by both the government and families of the visitors. The government is already responsible with paying the retirees' salaries, medical necessities such as operations, optional hospital stay overs following them, and the medicines. For instance, as long as people work, they are officially registered for the governmental insurance, which deduct some portion of their wages, so government should be taking care of them by funding the old peoples homes'. In addition to government support upon the old people, families should also provide by paying the necessary fees for their elderly to live, as intended, in good conditions. This will allow them to be able to go to bureau and work without being worried about the old people. Since they will be taken good care, all day long with sensible precautions while nurses keeping an eye on them to avoid any emergencies and doctors regularly visiting them to predict the anticipated conditions beforehand, their families should willingly pay the other portion of the expenses. This can also help a guest house to arrange social activities and obtain necessary products to be used meanwhile. For example, while I visited my grandfather, I witnessed them organizing events by inviting musicians, ordering special catering services for tea time parties, or board games. Thus, for the stability old nurse homes, the expenses should be a shared responsibility of mostly the government and to a small extend the families. Children, grandchildren or any young family members of residents must visit, spread the joy and care about the elderly members of their family.
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often
for senior citizens to
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live
in nursing homes with other guest in similar conditions. These
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centres
have various expenses due to medical inventory including special drugs required by patients, daily hygiene, nutritional necessities such as presenting fresh food three times a day. Such expenses need to
be paid
by both the
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government
and
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families
of the visitors.

The
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government
is already responsible with paying the retirees' salaries, medical necessities such as operations, optional hospital stay overs following them, and the medicines.
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, as long as
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people
work, they are
officially
registered for the governmental insurance, which deduct
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some
portion of their wages,
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so
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government
should be taking care of them by funding the
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old
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peoples
homes'.

In addition
to
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government
support upon the
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old
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people
,
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families
should
also
provide by paying the necessary fees for their elderly to
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live
, as intended, in
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good
conditions. This will
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allow
them to be able to go to bureau and work without
being worried
about the
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old
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people
. Since they will
be taken
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good
care, all day long with sensible precautions while nurses keeping an eye on them to avoid any emergencies and doctors
regularly
visiting them to predict the anticipated conditions beforehand, their
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families
should
willingly
pay the other portion of the expenses. This can
also
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help
a guest
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house
to arrange social activities and obtain necessary products to be
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used
meanwhile.
For example
, while I visited my grandfather, I witnessed them organizing
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events
by inviting musicians, ordering special catering services for tea time parties, or board games.

Thus
, for the stability
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old
nurse homes, the expenses should be a shared responsibility of
mostly
the
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government
and to a
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small
extend the
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families
. Children, grandchildren or any young
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family
members of residents
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must
visit, spread the joy and care about the elderly members of their
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family
.
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IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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