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Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to solve this issue?

Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to solve this issue? 2wrx
Nowadays, people are regularly informed about the the danger of unhealthy lifestyles. Even though, outstanding advancement in the medical field, people are still suffering and being killed because of these diseases most of which are preventable. According to number of scientific source inclination of people to harmful habits based on pychological movements. Thereby, before the development of pychological science, people were not awared of damages what high-range consumption cigarettes, alchoholic drinks could cause. So, science impose cognition to people about their health and all health activites have been investigated and analyzed in order to find out the reasons and to tackle them. Firstly, one of the main harmful habits is cigarette what people can not rid of this due to addiction of tobacco and nicotine. Thus, these matters has been proved to be the cause of lung cancer. Secondly, consumption of alchohol is another practical issue that is affecting the lives of millions of people worldwide. Thirdly, continiously consumption of junk food and fizzy drinks cause irreplaceable ailments on the human body such as diabets, stomach diseases, overweight or obesity. In my view, governments and organizations which struggle with these dangerous health issues to prevent addiction, should not only to educate and enlighten them but also make obligations. These kind of regulations and preventions will be able to make them to give up unhealthy habits in order to lead healthier life.
Nowadays,
people
are
regularly
informed about
the the
danger
of unhealthy lifestyles.
Even though
, outstanding advancement in the medical field,
people
are
still
suffering and
being killed
because
of these diseases most of which are preventable.

According to number of scientific source inclination of
people
to harmful habits based on
pychological
movements. Thereby,
before
the development of
pychological
science,
people
were not
awared
of damages what high-range consumption cigarettes,
alchoholic
drinks could cause.
So
, science impose cognition to
people
about their health and all health
activites
have
been investigated
and analyzed in order to find out the reasons and to tackle them.

Firstly
, one of the main harmful habits is cigarette what
people
can not rid of this due to addiction of tobacco and nicotine.
Thus
, these matters has
been proved
to be the cause of lung cancer.

Secondly
, consumption of
alchohol
is another practical issue
that is
affecting the
lives
of millions of
people
worldwide.

Thirdly
,
continiously
consumption of junk food and fizzy drinks cause irreplaceable ailments on the human body such as
diabets
, stomach diseases, overweight or obesity.

In my view,
governments
and organizations which struggle with these
dangerous
health issues to
prevent
addiction, should not
only
to educate and enlighten them
but
also
make
obligations.

These kind
of regulations and
preventions
will be able to
make
them to give up unhealthy habits in order to lead healthier life.
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IELTS essay Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to solve this issue?

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