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In about 140 words, write a paragraph about the following topic: “In many countries, young people leave rural areas for studying and working in cities. What are the causes of this trend?”

In about 140 words, write a paragraph about the following topic: “In many countries, young people leave rural areas for studying and working in cities. What are the causes of this trend? ” wO5lq
In today’s world, a lot of young people have an inclination move to big cities for studying and working because of several reasons. This paragraph will display why people take a liking for doing it. The main reason of this problems is a better educational opportunities. Young people recognize many benefits that it bring. For example, having more chances to get access to prestigious schools which offer better facilities for studying. The biggest advantage to higher education to students is a better employment propect. Moreover, economies are becoming more and more knowledge-based. A degree will open the door to these opportunities. Higher qualifications which easy for most young people to find work. However, for a metropolis to maintain a healthy economy, it will need a diverse workforce. So, if young generations are low-skilled and inexperienced workers, they could also easy find a suitable jobs do not require knowledge. In conclusion, on a personal level, big metropolis can provide young people with improved education, living standard and employment chances, so they are willing to migrate from suburb to urban to charge their live and move up the social ladder.
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today
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a lot of
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young
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people
have an inclination
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move
to
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big
cities for studying and working
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because
of several reasons. This paragraph will display why
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people
take a liking for doing it. The main reason of
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this
problems is a better educational opportunities.
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Young
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people
recognize
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many
benefits that it bring.
For example
, having more chances to
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get
access to prestigious schools which offer better facilities for studying. The biggest advantage to higher education to students is a better employment
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propect
.
Moreover
, economies are becoming more and more knowledge-based. A degree will open the door to these opportunities. Higher qualifications which easy for most
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young
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people
to find work.
However
, for a metropolis to maintain a healthy economy, it will need a diverse workforce.
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So
, if
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young
generations are low-skilled and inexperienced workers, they could
also
easy find a suitable
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jobs
do not require knowledge.
In conclusion
, on a personal level,
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big
metropolis can provide
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young
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people
with
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improved
education, living standard and employment chances,
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so
they are willing to migrate from suburb
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to urban to
charge their
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live
and
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move
up the social ladder.
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IELTS essay In about 140 words, write a paragraph about the following topic: “In many countries, young people leave rural areas for studying and working in cities. What are the causes of this trend? ”

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  American English
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188 words
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