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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. 3e8b
A lot of people believe that the governments should spend more money on creating new railways for fast trains between cities, while others argue that the capital should go into developing the pre-existing public transport. I agree that the money  should be spent on railway stations for advanced trains. Firstly, the essay will discuss the advantages of funding railways and secondly, it will talk about the superiority of developing the already existing vehicles. On one hand, constructing new railroads can positively impact both people and the economy. In other words, new rails for fast trains will save a lot of cash and time for people who don't own a personal vehicle, or whose workplace is located in a different city. Moreover, it can improve the efficiency of trading within the country by connecting cities with each other, and making it richer. For example, in Japan, every city is connected to each other with a huge railway system, giving people the opportunity to work on other parts of the country, and,  subsequently, not harm the economy. On the other hand,  the government should spend its money on advancing the existing public transportation. To put it simply, the cost of purchasing high-end trains is very expensive for a lot of countries; thus, it makes sense to improve the other, cheaper, alternatives, such as buses, metros, and trams. Furthermore, they can design a new route system for those vehicles that will connect to other cities, which is way more inexpensive than trains. For instance, in Russia, people, mostly, use buses and trams to travel around the country, and the people never complained about it, and some even said that it is more efficient and comfortable for them. To summarize, it is visible that both sides can give the nation a great benefit, whether it is by creating railways or other transports. However, I agree that the trains have the upper hand because they are more efficient and will benefit the economy.
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stations for advanced
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railways
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secondly
, it will talk about the superiority of developing the already existing vehicles.

On one hand, constructing
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new
railroads can
positively
impact both
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people
and the economy. In
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other
words,
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new
rails for
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fast
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trains
will save
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people
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own
a personal vehicle, or whose workplace
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different
city.
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improve
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by connecting
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with each
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other
, and making it richer.
For example
, in Japan, every city
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to each
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other
with a huge
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railway
system, giving
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people
the opportunity to work on
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other
parts of the
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country
, and,
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subsequently
, not harm the economy.

On the
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other
hand,
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the
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government
should spend its money on advancing the existing public transportation. To put it
simply
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end
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trains
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, cheaper, alternatives, such as buses, metros, and trams.
Furthermore
, they can design a
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new
route system for those vehicles that will connect to
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other
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cities
, which is way more inexpensive than
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trains
.
For instance
, in Russia,
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people
,
mostly
,
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use
buses and trams to travel around the
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country
, and the
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people
never complained about it, and
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even said that it is more efficient and comfortable for them.

To summarize
, it is visible that both sides can give the nation a great benefit, whether it is by creating
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railways
or
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other
transports.
However
, I
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agree
that the
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trains
have the upper hand
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because
they are more efficient and will benefit the economy.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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328 words
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