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many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on span why it is positive or a negative development

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Today's children are different from the children of previous generation. They are more interested in playing video games or sitting hours on the Playstation than in playing outdoor games. This essay intends to analyze the reason of this phenomenon. I believe that this is a negative development. The main reason why children spend more time on electronic games is that today's children are technology oriented. No matter how young the child is he knows everything about the future of computer and mobile phones to add to it parents also prefer that children playing in the games under the air conditioner instead of going out and getting dirty.
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than in playing outdoor
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. This essay intends to analyze the reason of this phenomenon. I believe that this is a
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development. The main reason why
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children
spend more time on electronic
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games
is that
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are technology oriented. No matter how young the child is he knows everything about the future of computer and mobile phones to
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IELTS essay many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on span why it is positive or a negative development

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
107 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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