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impressive buildings for a city-task 2

impressive buildings for a city-task 2 RkK3M
Huge, attractive buildings have a significant value to lots of people who live in a city. But some people support that schools and hospitals need to more attraction compared to buildings. Firstly, impressive buildings can contribute to a city, local citizens. Thanks to unusual buildings with a good urban planning, a city gets lots of benefits from tourists and those buildings become a landmark for them. They add variety and interest. Tourists are willing to spend money so, they bring money. In addition, this kind of structures could be use to important functions such as exhibition halls, galleries, hotels, shop centers, libraries, etc. For example, cubic houses which is a museum and a hotel in holland are interesting structures for many people in the world and they just go there to see inside these houses. On the other hand, I also believe that schools and hospitals should be improved regularly to provide people a good, quality service. Governments should give attention on these sectors to improve people’s quality of life which means to develop country. For instance, Finland had a quite bad fortune at the old times and citizens had come together and made and incredible change thanks to the importance they give to education. When people cannot receive proper, enough education and healthcare services that could cause a big problem for a country and it begins to decline dramatically. In conclusion, I think that both of them are incredibly important to improve a country. Therefore, governments need to balance between them and should give equal importance them.
Huge, attractive
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have a significant value to lots of
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people
who
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live
in a city.
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But
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some
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people
support that schools and hospitals need to more attraction compared to buildings.

Firstly
, impressive
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buildings
can contribute to a city, local citizens. Thanks to unusual
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buildings
with a
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good
urban planning, a city
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gets
lots of benefits from tourists and those
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buildings
become a landmark for them. They
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add
variety and interest. Tourists are willing to spend money
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so
, they bring money.
In addition
, this kind of structures could be
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use
to
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important
functions such as exhibition halls, galleries, hotels, shop centers, libraries, etc.
For example
, cubic
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houses
which is a museum and a hotel in
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holland
are interesting structures for
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many
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people
in the
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world and
they
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just
go there to
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see
inside these
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houses
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, I
also
believe that schools and hospitals should be
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improved
regularly
to provide
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people
a
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good
, quality service.
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Governments
should give attention on these sectors to
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improve
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people’s
quality of life which means to develop country.
For instance
, Finland had a quite
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bad
fortune at the
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old
times and citizens had
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come
together and made and incredible
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change
thanks to the importance they give to education. When
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people
cannot receive proper,
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enough
education and healthcare services that could cause a
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big
problem for a country and it
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begins
to decline
dramatically
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that both of them are
incredibly
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important
to
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improve
a country.
Therefore
,
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governments
need to balance between them and should give equal importance them.
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IELTS essay impressive buildings for a city-task 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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