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Important things in our life

Important things in our life Lpo6
I write about important things in our life it is food. It is not only energy and tasty, this food upgrades our soul. When we would eat our family’s food we feel that we lovely person. It is important feelings to felling love other person. In our country every girls which age before 16 she can cook our national food because it is not stereotypes about our responsibilities, our people believe that tasty and food cooked by with love makes our happy. May be some person can cook well but only real chef cooked with enthusiasm and important love. I want say that some typical thing in our life there are food, clothes, community, and very simple our morning it is not simple things and this thing it’s normal. This is our presents from God. In this time we thinking only about myself and problems, what we forgot appreciate simple things. Shortly my thoughts is we every day got present and other gifts, and it’s not important what is it, mainly we must appreciate and will see it and said: I have many opportunities and I grateful
I write about
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things in our life it is
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food
. It is not
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only
energy and tasty, this
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food
upgrades our soul.
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When
we would eat our family’s
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food
we feel that we lovely person. It is
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important
feelings to felling
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love
other person. In our country every
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girls
which age
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before
16 she can cook our national
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food
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because
it is not stereotypes about our responsibilities, our
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people
believe that tasty and
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food
cooked by with
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love
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makes
our happy.
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May be
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some
person can cook well
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but
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only
real chef cooked with enthusiasm and
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important
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love
. I want say that
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some
typical thing in our life there are
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food
, clothes, community, and
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very
simple our morning it is not simple things and this thing it’s normal. This is our presents from God. In this time
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we thinking
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only
about myself and problems, what we forgot appreciate simple things. Shortly my thoughts is we every day
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got
present and other gifts, and it’s not
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important
what is it,
mainly
we
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must
appreciate and will
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see
it and said: I have
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many
opportunities and I
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grateful

IELTS essay Important things in our life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
186 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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