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Immunization to prevent children from disease

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Some people argue that the state does not have the right to make parents to immunize their children However, I feel the question is not whether they should immunise but whether, as members of society, they have the right not to. Immunization is a safe and effective way to prevent disease and save lives – now more than ever. Today there are vaccines available to protect against at least 20 diseases, such as diphtheria, tetanus, pertussis, influenza, measles and Covid -19. Together, these vaccines save the lives of up to 3 million people every year. Preventative medicine has proved to be the most effective way of reducing the incidence of fatal childhood diseases. As a result of the widespread practice of immunizing young children in our society, many lives have been saved and the diseases have been reduced to almost zero. In previous centuries children died from ordinary illnesses such as influenza and tuberculosis and because few people had immunity, the diseases spread easily. Diseases such as dysentery were the result of poor hygiene but these have long been eradicated since the arrival of good sanitation and clean water. Nobody would suggest that we should reverse this good practice now because dysentery has been wiped out. Serious diseases such as polio and smallpox have also been eradicated through national immunization programmes. In consequence, children not immunized are far less at risk in this disease-free society than they would otherwise be. Parents choosing not to immunise are relying on the fact that the diseases have already been eradicated. If the number of parents choosing not to immunize increased, there would be a similar increase in the risk of the diseases returning Immunization is not an issue like seatbelts which affects only the individual. A decision not to immunize will have widespread repercussions for the whole of society and for this reason, I do not believe that individuals have the right to stand aside. In my opinion immunization obligatory. When we get vaccinated, we aren’t just protecting ourselves, but also those around us. Some people, like those who are seriously ill, are advised not to get certain vaccines – so they depend on the rest of us to get vaccinated and help reduce the spread of disease. During the COVID-19 pandemic, Immunization continues to be critically important. The pandemic has caused a decline in the number of children receiving routine immunizations, which could lead to an increase in illness and death from preventable diseases. WHO has urged countries to ensure that essential immunization and health services continue, despite the challenges posed by COVID-19
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immunise
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whether, as members of
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, they have the right not to. Immunization is a safe and effective way to
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prevent
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now
more than ever.
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Today
there are vaccines available to protect against at least 20
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diseases
, such as diphtheria, tetanus, pertussis, influenza, measles and
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Covid
-19. Together, these vaccines save the
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lives
of up to 3 million
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people
every year.

Preventative medicine has proved to be the most effective way of reducing the incidence of fatal childhood
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diseases
.
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of the widespread practice of immunizing young
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children
in our
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society
,
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many
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lives
have
been saved
and the
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diseases
have been
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reduced
to almost zero. In previous centuries
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children
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died
from ordinary illnesses such as influenza and tuberculosis and
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because
few
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people
had immunity, the
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diseases
spread
easily
.
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such as dysentery were the result of poor hygiene
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these have long
been eradicated
since the arrival of
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good
sanitation and clean water.

Nobody would suggest that we should reverse this
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good
practice
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now
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because
dysentery has
been wiped
out. Serious
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diseases
such as polio and smallpox have
also
been eradicated
through national immunization
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programmes
. In consequence,
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children
not immunized are far less at
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risk
in this disease-free
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society
than they would
otherwise
be. Parents choosing not to
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immunise
are relying on the fact that the
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have already
been eradicated
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risk
of the
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returning


Immunization is not an issue like seatbelts which affects
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only
the individual. A decision not to immunize will have widespread repercussions for the whole of
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society
and
for this reason
, I do not believe that individuals have the right to stand aside. In my opinion immunization obligatory.

When we
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vaccinated, we aren’t
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protecting ourselves,
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also
those around us.
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Some
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people
, like those who are
seriously
ill,
are advised
not to
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get
certain vaccines
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–
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so
they depend on the rest of us to
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get
vaccinated and
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help
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reduce
the spread of
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disease
. During the COVID-19 pandemic, Immunization continues to be
critically
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important
. The pandemic has caused a decline in the number of
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children
receiving routine immunizations, which could lead to an increase in illness and death from preventable
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diseases
. WHO has urged countries to ensure that essential immunization and health services continue, despite the challenges posed by
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COVID-19
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IELTS essay Immunization to prevent children from disease

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
430 words
5.5
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