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Immigration has a major impact on the society What are the main reasons for immigration To what consequences can it lead v.1

Immigration has a major impact on the society What are the main reasons for immigration To what consequences can it lead v. 1
Public libraries used to be the treasure house of knowledge and information, but according to some people in this age of the internet they are of no importance. Of course, many people disagree with this view. In my opinion, state funded libraries certainly have become less important than they used to be; however, I cannot support the argument that they are no longer important. The internet has made state run libraries less important. These days, if you have a device like a smart phone or a computer and an internet connection, you can find up to date information on any topic in a fraction of seconds. Actually, finding information online is a whole lot easier than going to a library and reading voluminous books. Thanks to the search function of the internet, we do not have to turn over pages after pages to find what we want. We just need to type in our query and we get the answer instantly. Needless to say, people who have constant access to the internet no longer visit libraries. On the other hand, public libraries still serve some valuable purpose. To start with, the information on the internet is relatively new whereas libraries have an impressive collection of old manuscripts that are not available online. Also, much of the information online is in English, whereas libraries have a huge collection of books written in a wide variety of languages. What’s more, libraries only keep the best reference books on a topic; by contrast, information found online can be unreliable or false because there is no one to check the veracity of data posted online. For this reason, libraries are still the best source of information for research scholars. Moreover, the Libraries also provide a quiet environment where students can read without facing any distractions. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that public libraries have lost some of their importance. Even so, they are still needed because information stored in a library has been always reliable and accurate. Also, libraries have old books and manuscripts that are not available online.
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in this age of the internet they are of no importance.
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disagree with this view. In my opinion, state funded libraries
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important
.

The internet has made state run libraries less
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important
. These days, if you have a device like a smart phone or a computer and an internet connection, you can find up to date
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information
on any topic in a fraction of seconds. Actually, finding
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information
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online
is a
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easier than going to a library and reading voluminous
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books
. Thanks to the search function of the internet, we do not
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have to
turn over pages after pages to find what we want. We
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who have constant access to the internet no longer visit libraries.

On the other hand
, public libraries
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valuable purpose. To
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on the internet is
relatively
new whereas libraries have an impressive collection of
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old
manuscripts that are not available
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.
Also
, much of the
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information
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is in English, whereas libraries have a huge collection of
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books
written in a wide variety of languages. What’s more, libraries
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the best reference
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on a topic; by contrast,
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can be unreliable or false
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the veracity of data posted
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For this reason
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still
the best source of
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information
for research scholars.
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provide a quiet environment where students can read without facing any distractions.

In conclusion
, there is no denying the fact that public libraries have lost
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some
of their importance. Even
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, they are
still
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because
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stored in a library has been always reliable and accurate.
Also
, libraries have
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old
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books
and manuscripts that are not available
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IELTS essay Immigration has a major impact on the society What are the main reasons for immigration To what consequences can it lead v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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