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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? n9Bn
Immigration has a significant impact on the contemporary society. Each year, more and more people from all over the world decide to leave their home countries and move to another place. This essay will examine the reasons and the consequences of immigration. In my view, the main reason of immigration is a strong desire of better life quality and safe future. A lot of people from so-called Third World move to developed countries in search of better employment opportunities, and therefore, higher incomes. Moreover, living in a wealthy country implies living in a country with stable economy, so risks of losing their savings also lessen. For example, labour migration from Mexico to the USA is caused by these facts. Other reasons that force whole families to cross borders are wars and various cultural conflicts in their homeland. Many people migrate, seeking security and safe future for their children. For instance, most of the refugees who arrived in the European Union were escaping from wars. However, sometimes immigration causes more problems than it solves, resulting in negative consequences for both immigrants and their countries of destination. First of all, most of the refugees can’t find jobs because of the lack of language skills and difficulties in adaptation. That’s why the countries have to run various refugee assistance programs to help those people. But disproportionate burden of maintaining the immigrants leads to tension in the society. Secondly, not all of the refugees receive proper asylum, food and medical care. So they are at risk even after crossing the border. Finally, even highly qualified specialists, who seek better employment, often don’t get what they are looking for. In conclusion, I think that people immigrate to have better life prospects. However, life after immigration may not always meet people’s expectations. So it’s very important to consider all the possible outcomes and decide whether leaving your homeland is worth it.
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Immigration
has a significant impact on the contemporary society. Each year, more and more
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people
from all over the world decide to
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leave
their home
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countries
and
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move
to another place. This essay will examine the reasons and the consequences of immigration.

In my view, the main reason of
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immigration
is a strong desire of
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better
life quality and safe future.
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A lot of
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people
from
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so
-called Third World
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move
to developed
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countries
in search of
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better
employment opportunities, and
therefore
, higher incomes.
Moreover
, living in a wealthy
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country
implies living in a
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country
with stable economy,
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so
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risks
of losing their savings
also
lessen.
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,
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migration from Mexico to the USA
is caused
by these facts. Other reasons that force whole families to cross borders are wars and various cultural conflicts in their homeland.
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Many
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people
migrate, seeking security and safe future for their children.
For instance
, most of the
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refugees
who arrived in the European Union were escaping from wars.

However
,
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sometimes
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immigration
causes more problems than it solves, resulting in
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negative
consequences for both immigrants and their
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countries
of destination.
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First of all
, most of the
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refugees
can’t find jobs
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because
of the lack of language
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skills
and difficulties in adaptation. That’s why the
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countries
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have to
run various
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refugee
assistance programs to
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help
those
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people
.
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But
disproportionate burden of maintaining the immigrants leads to tension in the society.
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, not
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all of the
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refugees
receive proper asylum, food and medical care.
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So
they are at
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risk
even after crossing the border.
Finally
, even
highly
qualified specialists, who seek
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better
employment,
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often
don’t
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get
what they are looking for.

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, I
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think
that
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people
immigrate to have
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better
life prospects.
However
, life after
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immigration
may not always
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meet
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people’s
expectations.
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it’s
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very
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important
to consider all the possible outcomes and decide whether leaving your homeland is worth it.
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IELTS essay Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
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