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Immigration has a huge impact on the society. What are the main causes of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? v.1

Immigration has a huge impact on the society. What are the main causes of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? v. 1
Immigration has a huge impact on the society, each year, several people decide to leave their home country and move to another place. This essay will discuss the reasons and consequences of immigration. To begin with, a major reason for immigration is a desire for better- life and a safer future. This is so because, some people from developing countries move to developed societies in search of better job opportunities which therefore, results in more income. Moreover, leaving in a wealthy country implies habiting in a stable economy, thus, your savings are safe and risk of losing it is minimal, therefore one's future is secured. For instance, annually, Medical professionals in Nigeria migrate to developed-countries in search of well paid job thus, having more income and saving towards future endeavour. However, in some instances, immigration causes problems resulting in negative consequences for immigrants and their countries of destination. Firstly, there are issues of language barrier, this could be seen when a refugee finds it difficult to speak a certain language, this then results in social isolation. Secondly, there may be adaptation issues, therefore, for some while immigrants may need to depend on asylum for food and medical check up and this could serve as a burden for the host country. Finally, highly skilled refugees may not get a good job thus, they have to manage menial jobs. To illustrate, an engineer who aspires to work in an automobile industry may not get the offer. Hence, he has to accept the role of being a sales person, which is below his expectations. In conclusion, although, individuals migrate to get better life. However, life after immigration may be challenging, therefore it is better to consider possible outcomes before leaving your homeland.
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people
decide to
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leave
their home
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country
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move
to another place. This essay will discuss the reasons and consequences of immigration.

To
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begin
with, a major reason for
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immigration
is a desire for
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better-
life and a safer future. This is
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so
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because
,
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some
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people
from developing
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countries
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move
to developed societies in search of
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better
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job
opportunities which
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therefore
, results in more income.
Moreover
, leaving in a wealthy
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country
implies
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habiting
in a stable economy,
thus
, your savings are safe and
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risk
of losing it is minimal,
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therefore
one's future
is secured
.
For instance
,
annually
, Medical professionals in Nigeria migrate to developed-countries in search of well paid
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job
thus
, having more income and saving towards future
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endeavour
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However
, in
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some
instances,
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immigration
causes problems resulting in
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negative
consequences for immigrants and their
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countries
of destination.
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, there are issues of language barrier, this could be
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seen
when a refugee finds it difficult to speak a certain language, this then results in social isolation.
Secondly
, there may be adaptation issues,
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therefore
, for
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some
while immigrants may need to depend on asylum for food and medical
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check
up and this could serve as a burden for the host
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country
.
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,
highly
skilled refugees may not
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get
a
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good
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job
thus
, they
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have to
manage menial
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jobs
. To illustrate, an engineer who aspires to work in an automobile industry may not
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get
the offer.
Hence
, he
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has to
accept the role of being a sales person, which is below his expectations.

In conclusion
, although, individuals migrate to
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get
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better
life.
However
, life after
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immigration
may be challenging,
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therefore
it is
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better
to consider possible outcomes
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before
leaving your homeland.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Immigration has a huge impact on the society. What are the main causes of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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