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imagine that we went to camping inBidiyah desert with your friends and you faced some problems there write story

imagine that we went to camping inBidiyah desert with your friends and you faced some problems there write story lLMo9
One day my mates invited me to camp with them in the Bidiyah desert and immediately I accepted their invite. On that day everybody was happy we arrived there and we did lots of activities such as playing cards and we cooked food and chatted together and had fun it was a nice day. At the night we slept early to wake up early due to we will return to our homes. On the Next day, we were up and we had breakfast then all of us were ready. suddenly while my friend was driving his car got stuck in the sand. It was big trouble for us because we try to take out the wheel from the sand but unfortunately, we can't. It was very heavy so we stayed in that place until 9 pm waiting for anyone to help. And then we saw a flash coming from the other side immediately we tried to make a symbol to tell them that we are in a trouble. After that, they noticed us and they came directly to help us. They were able to take the wheel out from the sand for a half-hour. Finally, we appreciated them for their help and we return to our homes safely. We indeed had fun at first, but it was a tough experience for us.
One day my mates invited me to camp with them in the
Bidiyah
desert and immediately I
accepted
their invite. On that day everybody was happy we arrived
there and
we did lots of activities such as playing
cards and
we cooked food and chatted together and had fun it was a nice day. At the night we slept early to wake up early due to we will return to our homes. On the
Next
day, we were
up and
we had breakfast then all of us were ready.
suddenly
while my friend was driving his car
got
stuck in the sand. It was
big
trouble for us
because
we try to take out the wheel from the sand
but
unfortunately, we can't. It was
very
heavy
so
we stayed in that place until 9 pm waiting for anyone to
help
. And then we
saw
a flash coming from the other side immediately we tried to
make
a symbol to
tell
them that we are in a trouble. After that, they noticed
us and
they came
directly
to
help
us. They were able to take the wheel out from the sand for a half-hour.
Finally
, we appreciated them for their
help and
we return to our homes
safely
. We
indeed
had fun at
first
,
but
it was a tough experience for us.
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IELTS essay imagine that we went to camping inBidiyah desert with your friends and you faced some problems there write story

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  American English
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222 words
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