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If you want to introduce new food items, drug, or any such thing, you have to get tested before you apply them on humans. And as per the current status of development in the biological sciences, we won’t have any other options other than testing them on v.1

If you want to introduce new food items, drug, or any such thing, you have to get tested before you apply them on humans. And as per the current status of development in the biological sciences, we won’t have any other options other than testing them on v. 1
Juvenile crime rates increase dramatically in recent years. Some of them have antisocial behaviours, such as destroy schools. When some teenagers do wrong things, they are punished to clean streets instead of sent to the jail. In this article, I intend to analyse this topic and give my opinion. I agree that children should get punished if they do the wrong thing, but just simply send them to lockup is not a good way. To begin with, sending children to penitentiary may lead to a serious impact on their future lives. To be more specific, after they go out of lockup, people may discriminate them and make them difficult to find a job. They may hard to find a job. In addition, most young people are not really bad and harmful. If schools can educate them and teach them right behaviours, they will understand right or wrong during their growth. Last but not least, people should give a chance to juveniles to let them find the right path. By contrast, everyone should have responsibility for their faults. If children break laws many times without regret, they should be sent to confinement. Moreover, if children know they will not be sent to the penitentiary, some of them do do something insane, such as killing people. In conclusion, I agree that not to send children directly to lock up if they did the wrong things. But I assert that governments should introduce a specific law to juveniles, if they against this law in some situations, they may be sent to jail.
Juvenile crime rates increase
dramatically
in recent years.
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Some
of them have antisocial
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behaviours
, such as
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destroy
schools. When
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some
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teenagers
do
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wrong
things, they
are punished
to clean streets
instead
of
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sent
to the jail. In this article, I intend to
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analyse
this topic and give my opinion.

I
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agree
that
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children
should
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get
punished if they do the
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wrong
thing,
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but
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just
simply
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send
them to lockup is not a
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good
way. To
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begin
with, sending
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children
to penitentiary may lead to a serious impact on their future
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lives
. To be more specific, after they go out of lockup,
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people
may discriminate them and
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make
them difficult to find a job. They may
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hard
to find a job.
In addition
, most young
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people
are not
really
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bad
and harmful. If schools can educate them and teach them right
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behaviours
, they will understand right or
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wrong
during their growth. Last
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but
not least,
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people
should give a chance to juveniles to
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let
them find the right path.

By contrast, everyone should have responsibility for their faults. If
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children
break laws
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many
times without regret, they should be
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sent
to confinement.
Moreover
, if
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children
know they will not be
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sent
to the penitentiary,
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some
of them
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do do
something insane, such as killing
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people
.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that not to
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send
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children
directly
to lock up if they did the
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wrong
things.
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But
I assert that
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governments
should introduce a specific law to juveniles, if they against this law in
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some
situations, they may be
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sent
to jail.
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IELTS essay If you want to introduce new food items, drug, or any such thing, you have to get tested before you apply them on humans. And as per the current status of development in the biological sciences, we won’t have any other options other than testing them on v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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