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Biological warfare is the use of infectious agents with the intent to kill humans as an act of war. Some People believe that this type of warfare should be legally regularized by the UN. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.1

Biological warfare is the use of infectious agents with the intent to kill humans as an act of war. Some People believe that this type of warfare should be legally regularized by the UN. with this statement. v. 1
Biological weapons are commonly used in this modern world to kill men as other traditional weapons were used in the war. Some would argue that UN organization ought to control this kind of battle in a legal way. I completely agree with this notion because it may kill the humans indiscriminately in a country and also severely affects the underdeveloped nations. The main plausible reason why the UN must control biological warfare is that it not only hits the enemy but also targets the innocent citizens in a country. As an effect, most of people who are not even involve in a battle will lose their lives. They even have no information and are engage in their work. For example, Pakistan government has used virus to kill the militants in southern part of the country; however, the consequences was not limited to this part but also spread to the northern region and targeted the innocent people. The second viable reason is the impact of biological war to the underdeveloped countries. Although these nations are not in the race to the developed countries. Biological species can reach them through the state-of-the-art mode of transport. People move from one corner of the world to the other corner. The underdeveloped world have not ample resources to control this lethal species. As an example, in the recent outbreak of COVID-19 virus, the undeveloped countries, such as western Africa could not fight against this deleterious virus due to their impoverished economy. In conclusion, UN organization must legally control the biological war owing to its indiscriminately impact on the innocent people and effect on the undeveloped countries.
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Biological
weapons are
commonly
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used
in this modern world to kill
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men
as other traditional weapons were
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used
in the war.
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Some
would argue that UN organization ought to
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control
this kind of battle
Consider replacing "in a legal way" with the adverb for "legal"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a legal way
. I completely
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agree
with this notion
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because
it may kill the humans
indiscriminately
in a
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country
and
also
severely
affects the underdeveloped nations.

The main plausible reason why the UN
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must
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control
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biological
warfare is that it not
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only
hits the enemy
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but
also
targets the innocent citizens in a
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country
. As an effect, most of
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people
who are not even involve in a battle will lose their
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lives
. They even have no information and are
Consider using a past participle here: "engaged".
engage
in their work.
For example
, Pakistan
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government
has
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used
virus to kill the militants in southern part of the
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country
;
however
, the consequences was not limited to this part
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but
also
spread to the northern region and targeted the innocent
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people
.

The second viable reason is the impact of
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biological
war to the underdeveloped
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countries
.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
these nations are not in the race to the developed
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countries
.
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Biological
species can reach them through the state-of-the-art mode of transport.
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People
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move
from one corner of the world to the other corner. The underdeveloped world have not ample resources to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
control
this lethal species. As an example, in the recent outbreak of COVID-19 virus, the undeveloped
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countries
, such as western Africa could not fight against this deleterious virus due to their impoverished economy.

In conclusion
, UN organization
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must
legally
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control
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
biological
war owing to its
indiscriminately
impact on the innocent
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people
and effect on the undeveloped
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countries
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Biological warfare is the use of infectious agents with the intent to kill humans as an act of war. Some People believe that this type of warfare should be legally regularized by the UN. with this statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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