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If you had a chance to make a change to your school, what would you do to make it better place for you and your schoolmates

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If I have the opportunity to change my school, I will contribute to the realization of the industry's common goals, improve the quality of teaching and learning, and accelerate the emulation movement "Building a friendly school. ", positive students ”we need to have a breakthrough in how to think and how to do it. I will continue to promote class decoration, create a friendly learning environment. Promote student-centered teaching. Create a friendly learning environment in teaching and education to attract students actively and actively participate in learning and training. Creating opportunities for students to explore and explore by themselves. Teachers need to perform their role just as mentors, organize activities, help and support them in learning so that students can promote their activeness, initiative and creativity in activities. study.
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the quality of teaching and
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, and accelerate the emulation movement
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Building a friendly school.
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and how to do it. I will continue to promote
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decoration, create a friendly
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learning
environment. Promote student-centered teaching. Create a friendly
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learning
environment in teaching and education to attract
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students
actively
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participate in
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learning
and training. Creating opportunities for
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students
to explore and explore by themselves. Teachers need to perform their role
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as mentors, organize activities,
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learning
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that
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can promote their activeness, initiative and creativity in activities.
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IELTS essay If you had a chance to make a change to your school, what would you do to make it better place for you and your schoolmates

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
129 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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