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If you could choose to live in a place anywhere in the world, which of the following would be most important to you; Language, food or weather. Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v.2

If you could choose to live in a place anywhere in the world, which of the following would be most important to you; Language, food or weather. Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2
Food, Weather and language play an important role while choosing a place to live. Food is essential to survive, weather to embrace nature and language to communicate efficiently. If I could choose a place anywhere in the world, weather would be the most important to me. Firstly, I am a nature lover. I always embraced the qualities of nature. I also learned so many things from nature like patience, punctuality, being happy and so on. All these would be possible if the weather of my place is nice. For instance, I have a habit of going for jog daily in the morning. The weather plays a key role in this because it should not rain or snow. A sunny day with optimal temperature is well suited for my jog. So, I can just go for my morning jog without any hassles and can start the day by saying good morning to sun, hello to little fresh flowers, listening to nature’s music by morning birds and have the fresh air from the greenery of the place. Thus, I can start my day as per my wish if the weather is quite comfortable. Secondly, weather also plays a key role in the time of travel. I always love to explore the city I live in by visiting new cafes, historical monuments and temples and any exciting pubs. I can visit all these places in my car if the weather is nice. For example, I had done my internship in Delhi, a state in India. It has usually high temperatures. One weekend, I went to visit Taj Mahal which would take a couple of hours from Delhi along with my friends. We started in the morning and able to reach by 10 A. M. The day’s weather is so hot. Though we started early in the morning, I felt like I was in the middle of the sun due to the temperature. As a result, I just covered myself with my stole and just seen Taj Mahal for 5 minutes though it is one of the wonders of the world. I was so impatient that day and disappointed as I was not able to enjoy the trip due to the bad weather. To conclude, weather is more important to me than food and language because I know cooking and can prepare dishes on my own. I can learn the language of the city if I try to speak. But weather is not in my hands. It all depends on the nature and location of the place. So, I choose weather for me being a nature lover and avid traveler.
Food,
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and
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language
play an
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important
role while choosing a
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place
to
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live
. Food is essential to survive,
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weather
to embrace
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nature
and
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language
to communicate
efficiently
. If I could choose a
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place
anywhere in the world,
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weather
would be the most
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important
to me.

Firstly
, I am a
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nature
lover. I always embraced the qualities of
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nature
. I
also
learned
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so
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many
things from
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nature
like patience, punctuality, being happy and
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so
on. All these would be possible if the
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weather
of my
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place
is nice.
For instance
, I have a habit of going for jog daily in the
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morning
. The
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weather
plays a key role in this
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because
it should not rain or snow. A sunny day with optimal temperature is well suited for my jog.
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So
, I can
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just
go for my
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morning
jog without any hassles and can
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start
the day by saying
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good
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morning
to sun, hello to
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little
fresh flowers, listening to
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nature’s
music by
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morning
birds and have the fresh air from the greenery of the
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place
.
Thus
, I can
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start
my day as per my wish if the
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weather
is quite comfortable.

Secondly
,
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weather
also
plays a key role in the time of travel. I always
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love
to explore the city I
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live
in by visiting new
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cafes
, historical monuments and temples and any exciting pubs. I can visit all these
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places
in my car if the
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weather
is nice.
For example
, I had done my internship in Delhi, a state in India. It has
usually
high temperatures. One weekend, I went to visit Taj Mahal which would take a couple of hours from Delhi along with my friends. We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
in the
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morning
and able to reach by 10 A. M. The day’s
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weather
is
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so
hot. Though we
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started
early in the
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morning
, I felt like I was in the middle of the sun due to the temperature.
As a result
, I
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just
covered myself with my stole and
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just
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seen
Taj Mahal for 5 minutes though it is one of the wonders of the world. I was
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so
impatient that day and disappointed as I was not able to enjoy the trip due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
weather.

To conclude
,
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weather
is more
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important
to me than food and
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language
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because
I know cooking and can prepare dishes on my
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own
. I can learn the
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language
of the city if I try to speak.
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But
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weather
is not in my hands. It all depends on the
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nature
and location of the
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place
.
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So
, I choose
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weather
for me being a
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nature
lover and avid traveler.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay If you could choose to live in a place anywhere in the world, which of the following would be most important to you; Language, food or weather. Use specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
436 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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