Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

If some body like teacher in class or leader in meeting says something incorrect you will correct it right away or after the class finshing you will talk or say nothing v.1

If some body like teacher in class or leader in meeting says something incorrect you will correct it right away or after the class finshing you will talk or say nothing v. 1
It is important to consider that the increasing number of people who live in the cities has resulted in severe problems. This essay will explain why these problems might be occurred and will propose some ways to tackle them. One of the most significant problems that should be taken into consideration is the traffic jam. This is because the increasing number of people in urban cities had led to have an extreme pressure on transportation. For instance, in Chicago, an employee usually spends from one to two hours in traffic to reach the final destination while the distance is not more than 10 km, which should be reached within 15 minutes. To tackle this problem, the government should encourage their citizens to move to rural areas by giving them incentives such as a land to build a new home or to exempt them from taxes for at least three years. Another main problem is that the noticeable increase in crimes. The reason behind this is that criminals often find cities as a fortune to make robberies or thefts on some items that cannot be found in the countryside. To illustrate, the higher number of crimes in China had made the Chinese government worried about such rise that is explained by the incredibly high number of people. To combat this problem, individuals should secure their houses by installing metal locks on their front doors to assure the sense of secure and safety. In conclusion, two of the most risks on urban areas are the traffic jam and the risen number of committed crimes. However, these problems should be mitigated if the government offers some motives to their people and through people who are relied on strengthen the security of their houses.
It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to consider that the increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the cities has resulted in severe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. This essay will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
why these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
might
be occurred
and will propose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
ways to tackle them.

One of the most significant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
that should
be taken
into consideration is the traffic jam. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in urban cities had led to have an extreme pressure on transportation.
For instance
, in Chicago, an employee
usually
spends from one to two hours in traffic to reach the final destination while the distance is not more than 10 km, which should
be reached
within 15 minutes. To tackle this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should encourage their citizens to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to rural areas by giving them incentives such as a land to build a new home or to exempt them from taxes for at least three years.

Another main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
is that the noticeable increase in crimes. The reason behind this is that criminals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
find cities as a fortune to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
robberies or thefts on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
items that cannot
be found
in the countryside. To illustrate, the higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of crimes in China had made the Chinese
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
worried about such rise
that is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
by the
incredibly
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. To combat this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
, individuals should secure their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
by installing metal locks on their front doors to assure the sense of secure and safety.

In conclusion
, two of the most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
on urban areas are the traffic jam and the risen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of committed crimes.
However
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
should
be mitigated
if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
offers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
motives to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
are relied
on strengthen the security of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay If some body like teacher in class or leader in meeting says something incorrect you will correct it right away or after the class finshing you will talk or say nothing v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts