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I graduated with excellent grade and was the first in the class in the biotechnology major, but despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license, so I went through the field of administrative work, through which I was able to show my abilities and skills.

I graduated with excellent grade and was the first in the class in the biotechnology major, but despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license, so I went through the field of administrative work, through which I was able to show my abilities and skills. Momp9
I graduated with excellent grade and was the first in the class in the biotechnology major, but despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license, so I went through the field of administrative work, through which I was able to show my abilities and skills. I graduated with excellent grade and was the first in the class in the biotechnology major, but despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license, so I went through the field of administrative work, through which I was able to show my abilities and skills.
I graduated with excellent grade and was the
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in the biotechnology major,
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but
despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license,
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so
I went
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the field of administrative work,
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through
which I was able to
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. I graduated with excellent grade and was the
first
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
in the biotechnology major,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I went
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
through
the field of administrative work,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
through
which I was able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
my abilities and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

IELTS essay I graduated with excellent grade and was the first in the class in the biotechnology major, but despite that, I did not feel the passion to practice my license, so I went through the field of administrative work, through which I was able to show my abilities and skills.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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