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The most memorable gift I received when I was eleven years old, on my birthday, a bike. My father bought me the bike - The brand was BSA. It was painted as "RED" for me as it was my favorite color during my childhood days. I learned to ride bike near by my house, as the land was bleak and plain, thus it was easy to learn there by myself. After I learned how to steer, I would often bestride around by neighborhood through the alleys while my younger brother was jealous at me, because he can't mount that the bike was too big for him. When my younger brother grew up and got his own bike then we started to ride along through the streets together. At an afternoon I was just walking back home from my school, I seen a bike was carried in trunk of a hatchback car. When I saw the bike through the rear windshield, I thought that the one who is going to have that bike is really a luck one. But that lucky one turns out to be myself, as that car was driving by my father and it was driving towards my house. When I first got the bicycle I was very excited, and I realize it was very pretty. I was so happy to have it and my father took me out for to teach riding, on the same day. After that I managed myself to learn to steer with all the tips and tricks he taught. Later I enjoyed riding it, so much that I would ride it whenever I could. I proactively took responsibility for purchasing groceries on an intention that, it will get me another chance to get along with it as well as to drift on my bike. My sort of soulmate was along with me until I joined for my graduate course far away from my hometown. I can still find "HIM" in the attic of my house.
The most memorable gift I received when I was eleven years
old
, on my birthday, a
bike
. My father
bought
me the
bike
-
The brand was BSA. It
was painted
as
"
RED
"
for me as it was my favorite color during my childhood days. I learned to ride
bike
near by
my
house
, as the land was bleak and plain,
thus
it was easy to learn there by myself. After I learned how to steer, I would
often
bestride around by neighborhood through the alleys while my younger brother was jealous at me,
because
he can't mount that the
bike
was too
big
for him. When my younger brother grew up and
got
his
own
bike
then we
started
to ride along through the streets together.

At an afternoon I was
just
walking back home from my school, I
seen
a
bike
was carried
in trunk of a hatchback car. When I
saw
the
bike
through the rear windshield, I
thought
that the one who is going to have that
bike
is
really
a luck one.
But
that lucky one turns out to be myself, as that car was driving by my father and it was driving towards my
house
. When I
first
got
the bicycle I was
very
excited, and I realize it was
very
pretty. I was
so
happy to have it and my father took me out for to teach riding, on the same day. After that I managed myself to learn to steer with all the tips and tricks he taught. Later I enjoyed riding it,
so
much that I would ride it whenever I could. I
proactively
took responsibility for purchasing groceries on an intention that, it will
get
me another chance to
get
along with it
as well
as to drift on my
bike
. My sort of soulmate was along with me until I
joined
for my graduate course far away from my hometown. I can
still
find
"
HIM
"
in the attic of my
house
.
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IELTS essay Gifts got Got as present:

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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