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Human activities has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe action can be take to bring about change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Human activities has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe action can be take to bring about change. VbKA
It is undeniable fact that human activities always cause detrimental effect in environment. Some people think that these activities can not be controlled. While, others think that a change is possible by taking actions against it. Both sides of view should be analyzed before reasoned conclusion is drawn. First of all, some group think that the human being cannot be lived without the facilities and comforts which is brought by cutting edge technology. Nowadays, the technology become modern day by day. Furthermore, the hazardous effect generated by it on the plants and animals which is not changed. Take for instance forest researchers suggest that due to industrialisation, forest areas are reducing and animals are near to extinct which can not be brought back. That is why, some people think that nature which ruined by human can not get back again. Secondly, others claim that human's hazardous activities can be minimized by taking strong action against it. Additionally, government able to make strong laws to decrease pollution and protect animals and environment. For example, some developed countries generated strong laws to control human activities and save environment. Thus some people are thought that goverment actions and laws can be able to control dangerous activities done by humans. In conclusion, it is clear that both sides have a strong grounds in their views. However, in my opinion, goverment should make laws against detrimental activities of human and protect the environment and animals which are near to extinction.
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environment
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people
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can not
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change
is possible by taking actions against it. Both sides of view should
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before
reasoned conclusion
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,
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group
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being cannot be
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lived
without the facilities and comforts which
is brought
by cutting edge technology. Nowadays, the technology become modern day by day.
Furthermore
, the hazardous effect generated by it on the plants and
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animals
which is not
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changed
. Take
for instance
forest researchers suggest that due to
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industrialisation
, forest areas are reducing and
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animals
are near to extinct which can not
be brought
back.
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why,
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some
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people
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think
that nature which ruined by
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human
can not
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get
back again.
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, others claim that human's hazardous
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activities
can
be minimized
by taking
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strong
action against it.
Additionally
,
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government
able to
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make
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strong
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laws
to decrease pollution and protect
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animals
and
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environment
.
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,
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some
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developed countries
generated
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strong
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laws
to control
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human
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activities
and save
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environment
.
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goverment
actions and
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laws
can be able to control
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activities
done by
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humans
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, it is
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in their views.
However
, in my opinion,
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goverment
should
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laws
against detrimental
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of
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human
and protect the
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environment
and
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animals
which are near to extinction.
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IELTS essay Human activities has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe action can be take to bring about change.

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