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How to act paramedics when they see accident

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The Correct behavior of the paramedics when they seeing an accident. First, when they arrive at accident site. They should park at a safe place, and check if everyone is okay. Second, look foe casualtis first. Since that guve more attention to those unrespinsive. Meanwhile, do not move patients because this may causeother injries that increase their risk. Third step trying to stop bleeding first. Next, check for breathing and pulseof patients. If there's ni breathing or pulse they have do CPR. Finally, secure neck and spine with collar. After that moving them carefully to the ambulance by stretcher. Take the most seriously injured to hospital before other patients.
The Correct behavior of the paramedics when
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they seeing
an accident.
First
, when they arrive at accident site. They should park at a safe place, and
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check
if everyone is okay. Second, look foe
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casualtis
first
.
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that
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guve
more attention to those
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unrespinsive
. Meanwhile, do not
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move
patients
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because
this may
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causeother
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injries
that increase their
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risk
. Third step trying to
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stop
bleeding
first
.
Next
,
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check
for breathing and
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pulseof
patients. If there's
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ni
breathing or pulse they have
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do
CPR.
Finally
, secure neck and spine with collar.
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After
that moving them
carefully
to the ambulance by stretcher. Take the most
seriously
injured to hospital
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before
other patients.
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IELTS essay How to act paramedics when they see accident

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  American English
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109 words
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