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How much freedom a child should be given and what sort of punishment could be used to control them is a matter of great concern.

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How much freedom a child should be given and what sort of punishment could be used to control them is a matter of great concern. Undeniably, too much freedom and lack of necessary control often lead youngsters to go astray while too much punishment makes them dull and less creative. I personally believe that punishment is meant to help children learn lessons and that is why certain punishments that do not involve beating the children are useful. To begin with, early childhood experience and lessons have lasting impacts on someone’s life and that is why parents and teachers should try their best to teach morality and good qualities to children. Children are curious and sometimes less mature to understand certain harmful effects of doing something while every father and mother want the offspring to become an ideal and exemplary person in life. They often need to use certain punishment to teach a valuable lesson to a youngster and the sole purpose of this punishment should be teaching morality, should not be driven by any sort of personal anger or frustration. Physically beating a boy or a girl is in no way should be used as there are far better ways of punishing a child to teach him something. While physical punishment is no longer used in most the developed countries, it could still be found in underdeveloped countries. This form of punishment, in my opinion, should not be used. More effective penalties could be not talking to the child for a misconduct or not taking him to the playground for a day or two. Similarly, parents could refrain from awarding the child with chocolate or toys and reminding the child why he does not deserve those. If parents have a friendly relationship with the children and simply expressing their frustration for an act of the child, that would work like the magic. From my personal experience, I can say that I took matters more seriously when my father stopped talking to me for a certain period for something he disliked about me and I vowed many times to myself not to do that again. To conclude, punishment is necessary to teach children morality and help them learn to distinguish good things from bad ones. However, this punishment should not be physical, rather psychological and practical.
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and what sort of
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could be
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used
to control them is a matter of great concern.
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, too much freedom and lack of necessary control
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often
lead youngsters to go astray while too much
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punishment
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makes
them dull and less creative. I
personally
believe that
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punishment
is meant
to
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help
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children
learn lessons and
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why
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certain
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punishments
that do not involve beating the
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children
are useful.

To
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begin
with, early childhood experience and lessons have lasting impacts on someone’s life and
that is
why parents and teachers should try their best to
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teach
morality and
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good
qualities to
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children
.
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Children
are curious and
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sometimes
less mature to understand
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certain
harmful effects of doing something while every father and mother want the offspring to become an ideal and exemplary person in life. They
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often
need to
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use
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certain
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punishment
to
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teach
a valuable lesson to a youngster and the sole purpose of this
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punishment
should be teaching morality, should not
be driven
by any sort of personal anger or frustration.
Physically
beating a boy or a girl is in no way should be
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used
as there are far better ways of punishing a
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child
to
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teach
him something.

While physical
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punishment
is no longer
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used
in most the
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developed countries
, it could
still
be found
in underdeveloped countries. This form of
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punishment
, in my opinion, should not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
. More effective penalties could be not talking to the
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child
for a misconduct or not taking him to the playground for a day or two.
Similarly
, parents could refrain from awarding the
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child
with chocolate or toys and reminding the
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child
why he does not deserve those. If parents have a friendly relationship with the
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children
and
simply
expressing their frustration for an act of the
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child
, that would work like the magic. From my personal experience, I can say that I took matters more
seriously
when my father
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
talking to me for a
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certain
period for something he disliked about me and I vowed
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many
times to myself not to do that again.

To conclude
,
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punishment
is necessary to
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teach
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children
morality and
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help
them learn to distinguish
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good
things from
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bad
ones.
However
, this
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punishment
should not be physical,
rather
psychological and practical.
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IELTS essay How much freedom a child should be given and what sort of punishment could be used to control them is a matter of great concern.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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