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How does human activities affect the sea level

How does human activities affect the sea level 86KQP
In the past few decades, sea level has gradually increased. Though it is mentioned in the passage that it is not harmful and asserts that this process is typical and already happened before, the speaker in the lecture states that the rise in sea level is a big issue and further care should be taken on resolving this problem. The speaker feels that the rise in sea level is due to intervention of human activities and it is going to affect them severely. First of all, the author states that the polar ice melting does not account to increase in sea level. This was based on the fact that the ice is already on the water, as it is already displacing the water, it will not affect the sea level if it melts. But the speaker claims that the rise in water level is primarly due to melting of polar ice. She mentioned the Greenland and Iceland polar ice scenario. Deposits of ice are on the land. Due to increase in human acitivities - high consumption of fossil fuels - temperature of the atmosphere has increased, thus melting the polar ice deposits on the land. These deposits are significant and they are the reason for increase in sea level. Secondly, the author stated that the sea level fluctuation is a slow and gradual process that will not affect the humans as they have considerable amount of time to adjust. But the speakers disagree by saying that there is no enough time and immediate measures should be taken. As mentioned before, due to over usage of fossil fuels, green house effect has become prevalent. The ice cap melts 100 times faster than before which is a alamrming situation for humans situated nearer to the ocean. As economy and population is nearer to the oceans, almost 20% of the landmass are in risky state. As the melting of ice is 100 times faster, land mass nearer to the ocean will soon submerge under the ocean. In conclusion, author feels that there is no serious issue on the increase in sea level, but the speaker sees this issue in the opposite way, She states that the situation is severe and tangible measures should be taken to halt the increase in sea level.
In the past few decades,
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gradually
increased. Though it
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before
, the speaker in the lecture
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states
that the rise in
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sea
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level
is a
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big
issue and
further
care should
be taken
on resolving this problem. The speaker feels that the rise in
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sea
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level
is
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due
to intervention of
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human
activities and it is going to affect them
severely
.

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First of all
, the author
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states
that the
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polar
ice melting does not account to
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increase
in
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sea
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level
. This
was based
on the fact that the ice is already on the water, as it is already displacing the water, it will not affect the
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sea
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level
if it melts.
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But
the speaker claims that the rise in water
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level
is
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primarly
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due
to melting of
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polar
ice. She mentioned the Greenland and Iceland
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polar
ice scenario. Deposits of ice are on the land.
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Due
to
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increase
in
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human
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acitivities
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high consumption of fossil fuels
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temperature of the atmosphere has increased,
thus
melting the
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polar
ice deposits on the land. These deposits are
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significant and
they are the reason for
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increase
in
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sea
level.

Secondly
, the author stated that the
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sea
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fluctuation is a slow and gradual process that will not affect the
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humans
as they have considerable amount of
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time
to adjust.
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But
the speakers disagree by saying that there is no
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enough
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time
and immediate measures should
be taken
. As mentioned
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before
,
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due
to over usage of fossil fuels, green
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house
effect has become prevalent. The ice cap melts 100
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times
faster than
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before
which is
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a
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alamrming
situation for
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humans
situated nearer to the ocean. As economy and population is nearer to the oceans, almost 20% of the landmass are in risky
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state
. As the melting of ice is 100
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times
faster, land mass nearer to the ocean will
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soon
submerge under the ocean.

In conclusion
, author feels that there is no serious issue on the
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increase
in
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sea
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,
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but
the speaker
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sees
this issue in the opposite way, She
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states
that the situation is severe and tangible measures should
be taken
to halt the
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increase
in
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sea
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level
.
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IELTS essay How does human activities affect the sea level

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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