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How children growing up it’s important

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In the early childhood years children are learning the process skills of science as they apply to different subjects. In addition when a child has got siblings whereas they have got siblings rivalry. It has been a competition and frightening between brother and sister. Therefore, there can be lots of conflict between them. However, when they growing up and be adolescences they have got better relationships than before. Overall, no matter that children upbringing in an immediate family or extended family. Actually the fact that is important is that they have got stable upbringing. In conclusion, maternal instincts dramatically can improve the behavior and benefits of their children.
In the early childhood years children are learning the process
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of science as they apply to
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when a child has
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siblings whereas they have
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siblings rivalry. It has been a competition and frightening between brother and sister.
Therefore
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, when
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they growing
up and be adolescences they have
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better relationships than
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.
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, no matter that children upbringing in an immediate family or extended family. Actually the fact
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important
is that they have
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stable upbringing.
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the behavior and benefits of their children.

IELTS essay How children growing up it’s important

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
108 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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