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Despite the advancement that had been made in agriculture, numerous groups of human beings around the world suffers from huger. The thesis statement clearly shows the reader what are the problems and solutions actually are. The main problem consists of the over deforestation and the principal solution is by planting farms and increasing the surplus all around the world, (in the poor countries) particularly. There are a number of countries and regions, as well that over used the deforestation processes, which could lead to outstanding temperatures by major areas, not to forget mentioning the fires caused by the deforestation. for instance, a confessed survey that had came from the US admitting that several regions had over used deforestation, to be the reason of the forest fires in the amazon. So because of that the deserts out comes all the lands to end up causing hunger. Governments can help poor countries by giving them the sufficient needs of resources or by actually helping them restore there forests in the future only by in tensing the work, for example, every region must calibrate to retrieve the resources and the needs for its people by planting more and more trees. And they must do it now to prevent any loss of their current lands. To sum up, there are many causes of hunger, the principal cause is deforestation, there are plenty of solutions as well, for example, replanting any nearby area.
Despite the advancement that had
been made
in agriculture, numerous groups of human beings around the world suffers from huger. The thesis statement
clearly
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shows
the reader what are the problems and solutions actually are. The main problem consists of the over
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deforestation
and the principal solution is by planting farms and increasing the surplus all around the world, (in the poor countries)
particularly
.

There are a number of countries and regions,
as well
that over
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used
the
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deforestation
processes, which could lead to outstanding temperatures by major areas, not to forget mentioning the fires caused by the
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deforestation
.
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for
instance, a confessed survey that had
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came
from the US admitting that several regions had over
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used
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deforestation
, to be the reason of the forest fires in the
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amazon
.
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So
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because
of that the deserts out
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comes
all the lands to
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end
up causing hunger.

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Governments
can
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help
poor countries by giving them the sufficient needs of resources or by actually helping them restore there forests in the future
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only
by in tensing the work,
for example
, every region
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must
calibrate to retrieve the resources and the needs for its
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people
by planting more and more trees. And they
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must
do it
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now
to
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prevent
any loss of their
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current
lands.

To sum up, there are
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many
causes of hunger, the principal cause is
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deforestation
, there are
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plenty
of solutions
as well
,
for example
, replanting any nearby area.

IELTS essay Hot surplus resources all around the world

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
238 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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