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HOSTING INTERNATIONAL SPORTS EVENTS(BOTH THE VIEWS) You should spend 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: ‘Some people believe that hosting International sports events is highly beneficial, whereas others think it is create problems to the host country’ Discuss both the views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

Throughout the 21st century, a lot of significant global sports event were held at different location. Some people favour the concept of organizing the sports programs whereas some believe that it is just waste of time and money. In my opinion it has both positive and negative impact which I will further consider in the following paragraphs. Firstly, organizing the sports function will lead to the development of the host country as it builds the reputation and dignity all over the world. It also provides the improvement in the infrastructure in the city where the event is arranged. People from various cities and countries will come to visit the game event which will encourage tourism and it will further lead to the more revenue generation to the government of the host country. For instance, world's largest football tournament known as FIFA World Cup takes place in Russia once in every four year in which huge crowd from different places comes and attend the same, owing to the fact that it will boost the economy and the government will earn more money by selling the tickets. On the other hand, demerits of conducting such projects are it will adversely affect the daily life of the citizen and government have spent huge amount on providing basic amenities and security service to the visitors. Moreover, government will recover the expenditure amount from public through direct or indirect taxes which will intern create more tax burden on natives. To conclude, I strongly believe that in recent years the perception and attitude of the people have changed as they are now interested in the sports which they were not previously as a result many games function are being conducted worldwide. Therefore, in order to bring fame and name along with some financial benefit, hosting international event is acceptable and profitable.
Throughout the 21st century,
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a lot of
significant global
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sports
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event
were held
at
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different
location.
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Some
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people
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favour
the concept of organizing the
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sports
programs whereas
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some
believe that it is
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just
waste of time and money. In my opinion it has both
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positive
and
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negative
impact which I will
further
consider in the following paragraphs.

Firstly
, organizing the
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sports
function will lead to the development of the host country as it builds the reputation and dignity all over the world. It
also
provides the improvement in the infrastructure in the city where the
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event
is arranged
.
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People
from various cities and countries will
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come
to visit the game
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event
which will encourage
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tourism and
it will
further
lead to the more revenue generation to the
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government
of the host country.
For instance
, world's largest football tournament known as FIFA World Cup takes place in Russia once in every four year in which huge crowd from
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different
places
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comes
and attend the same, owing to the fact that it will boost the economy and the
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government
will earn more money by selling the tickets.

On the other hand
, demerits of conducting such projects are it will
adversely
affect the daily life of the citizen and
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government
have spent huge amount on providing basic amenities and security service to the visitors.
Moreover
,
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government
will recover the expenditure amount from public through direct or indirect taxes which will intern create more tax burden on natives.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that in recent years the perception and attitude of the
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people
have
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changed
as they are
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now
interested in the
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sports
which they were not previously
as a result
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many
games function are
being conducted
worldwide.
Therefore
, in order to bring fame and name along with
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some
financial benefit, hosting international
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event
is acceptable and profitable.
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IELTS essay HOSTING INTERNATIONAL SPORTS EVENTS(BOTH THE VIEWS) : ‘Some people believe that hosting International sports events is highly beneficial, whereas others think it is create problems to the host country’

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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