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Homeschooling- a good or a bad way of study?

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Nowadays, the educational system has developed considerably. Students can go to school easier and learn new information with the help of modern technologies. Being thought at home, you become underprivileged to do this. To start with, having a parent as a teacher can limit the student's mind as the child will be deprived of a lot of important information because the parent cannot have all the necessary knowledge. To continue with, a child thought at home will not have as many friends as a child that is learning at school. He might be unknown with social relationships and affection which can make him an introverted person. For instance, if he would go to a party, he might be too afraid to go and meet someone new, because of his lack of experience with meeting new people. Furthermore, a homeschooled student, might not attend cultural, hilarious or entertaining events, as he would not know that they are organised. In this way, he will be limited from demonstrating his talent or enriching more his knowledge. To sum up, teaching children at home is a bad thing because it can ruin the child’s chance to be social and can minimise his accomplishments.
Nowadays, the educational system has developed
considerably
. Students can go to school easier and learn new information with the
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help
of modern technologies. Being
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thought
at home, you become underprivileged to do this.

To
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start
with, having a parent as a teacher can limit the student's mind as the
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child
will
be deprived
of
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a lot of
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important
information
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because
the parent cannot have all the necessary knowledge.

To continue with, a
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child
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thought
at home will not have as
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many
friends as a
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child
that is
learning at school. He might be unknown with social relationships and affection which can
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make
him an introverted person.
For instance
, if he would go to a party, he might be too afraid to go and
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meet
someone new,
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because
of his lack of experience with meeting new
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people
.

Furthermore
, a homeschooled student, might not attend cultural, hilarious or entertaining
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events
, as he would not know that they are
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organised
. In this way, he will
be limited
from demonstrating his talent or enriching more his knowledge.

To sum up, teaching children at home is a
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bad
thing
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because
it can ruin the
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child’s
chance to be social and can
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minimise
his accomplishments.
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IELTS essay Homeschooling- a good or a bad way of study?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
199 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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