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Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. To what extent you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. 856Xx
It is true that for each individual there three things which considered as a necessity. One of them is shelter to each. Therefore, few are of the opinion that authorities should provide free shelters to those people, which are unable to pay of it. To a major extent, I do agree with this opinion. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs with the arguments. The primary reason for my inclination towards their point view is that, most importantly, if they have roofs on their heads, they can survive their lives. In other words, the strong roof not only protect them from heavy sunlight in case of sunny days but also during monsoon they can be safe under this roof. As a result, they cannot be a victim of any diseases such as hypothermia, dehydration, malaria and cold fever. Therefore, they can pay their important role in the country’s economy. As per survey, in UK almost everyone has shelter and it shows that their country’s progress is very fast as compared to other nations. In addition to this, it is the responsibility of government to ensure that each one has safe room. The ruling party only can be in power with the help of local’s vote. Thus, to deal and solve the issue of public problems is the priority of them regardless of anything else. Many nations have joined hand together with the private sector to provide the shelter to everyone. For instance, Indian prime minister announced that, by 2022 there will be home for everyone under the scheme of “Pradhanmantri Jan Dhan Yojana” with a free of cost. Thus, as a developing nation this would help to fight against the poverty. Nevertheless, I cannot over look other aspects too. To begin with, already there are other problems in the nations such as hunger and starvation. To meet the demand for food is a major problem for the third developed countries. The recent reports show that one out of each five now died in the Africa due to unavailability of food, for instance. To sum up, despite the fact that, there are other issue to be solve such as food to everyone, still my argument convince that shelter is the basic needs of each people who lives in the city to protect their families under extreme weather condition and fight against poverty.
It is true that for each individual there three things which considered as a necessity. One of them is
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shelter
to each.
Therefore
, few are of the opinion that authorities should provide free
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shelters
to those
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people
, which are unable to pay of it. To a major extent, I do
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agree
with this opinion. My inclination
is justified
in the ensuing paragraphs with the arguments.

The primary reason for my inclination towards their point view is that, most
importantly
, if they have roofs on their heads, they can survive their
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lives
. In
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other
words, the strong roof not
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only
protect them from heavy sunlight in case of sunny days
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but
also
during monsoon they can be safe under this roof.
As a result
, they cannot be a victim of any diseases such as hypothermia, dehydration, malaria and
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cold
fever.
Therefore
, they can pay their
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important
role in the country’s economy. As per survey, in UK almost
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everyone
has
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shelter
and it
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shows
that their country’s progress is
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very
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fast
as compared to
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other
nations.

In addition
to this, it is the responsibility of
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government
to ensure that each one has safe room. The ruling party
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can be in power with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of local’s vote.
Thus
, to deal and solve the issue of public problems is the priority of them regardless of anything else.
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Many
nations have
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joined
hand together with the private sector to provide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shelter
to
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everyone
.
For instance
, Indian prime minister announced that, by 2022 there will be home for
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everyone
under the scheme of “
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Pradhanmantri
Jan
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Dhan
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Yojana
” with a free of cost.
Thus
, as a developing nation this would
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help
to fight against the poverty.

Nevertheless
, I cannot over look
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other
aspects too. To
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begin
with, already there are
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other
problems in the nations such as hunger and starvation. To
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meet
the demand for food is a major problem for the third
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developed countries
. The recent reports
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show
that one out of each five
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now
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died
in the Africa due to unavailability of food,
for instance
.

To sum up, despite the fact that, there are
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other
issue to be solve such as food to
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everyone
,
still
my argument convince that
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shelter
is the basic needs of each
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
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lives
in the city to protect their families under extreme weather condition and fight against poverty.
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IELTS essay Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it.

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392 words
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