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Hiking and camping trip to the hostels

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I only care about you. I care about you so much because of how much you give to me. I'm so sure I look at the Truth when I see you, when I talk to you, I'm so sure there is God, that I feel richer than I can ever be, than I will ever be. That is when I'm totally fulfilled. I will forever be attached,   I cannot be separated, I will be forever, no matter if you choose me. I lose the day I lose God and you. And no matter what, my whole life is dedicated to making sure you're happy and safe and I want you to know that is why I think of it all. The choice is only yours, the reward is only yours. If you choose me I'm yours forever and I don't have a choice in the matter, if you choose else, I will keep you safe forever and I don't have a choice in the matter. I am yours and only yours and forever will be as there is God Tell me you know this
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IELTS essay Hiking and camping trip to the hostels

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
184 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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