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Hey I just got your message I sent you a message when I get home

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This is currently contentious argument over whether should be face interaction is suitable or carry out the social relationships. In my own perspective, we should focus on the face to face chats. Firstly, Nowadays science is much advance and provide us with the bundle of various websites. For example, Facebook, messenger, WhatsApp, Instagram etc. The reason is that people have a plethora of interest in these apps. The have thousands of friends on these sites for their daily conservation. Furthermore, Now they can spend their whole period on social media and neglect the relation with their school mates and other which is quite not appropriate. Owing to the fact that they become depressed and effect their eyes. On the other hand, an unfortunate consequence all of these people do not how to express their feeling. They lost the tone of their communication and social skills. Furthermore, Parents must control this critical situation to stop their children from using these unnecessary websites. Due to this fact student passed their essential time in these activities and unable to mange their time for the study. For example, a adverse impact on their minds merely for the using of social media and not doing there work perfectly. In conclusion, it is not appropriate to spend their time on computer and mobile. We must build strong relationship with outside community. Secondly, I will recommend scheduling a plan for these apps. People need to spend their less time on electronic device in order to improve their relation with other.
This is
currently
contentious argument over whether should be face interaction is suitable or carry out the
social
relationships. In my
own
perspective, we should focus on the face to face chats.

Firstly
, Nowadays science is much advance and provide us with the bundle of various websites.
For example
, Facebook, messenger, WhatsApp, Instagram etc. The reason is that
people
have a plethora of interest in these apps. The have thousands of friends on these sites for their daily conservation.
Furthermore
,
Now
they can spend their whole period on
social
media and neglect the relation with their school mates and other which is quite not appropriate. Owing to the fact that they become depressed and effect their eyes.

On the other hand
, an unfortunate consequence all of these
people
do not how to express their feeling. They lost the tone of their communication and
social
skills
.
Furthermore
, Parents
must
control this critical situation to
stop
their children from using these unnecessary websites. Due to this fact student passed their essential
time
in these activities and unable to mange their
time
for the study.
For example
,
a
adverse impact on their minds
merely
for the using of
social
media and not doing there work
perfectly
.

In conclusion
, it is not appropriate to spend their
time
on computer and mobile. We
must
build strong relationship with outside community.
Secondly
, I will recommend scheduling a plan for these apps.
People
need to spend their less
time
on electronic device in order to
improve
their relation with other.
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IELTS essay Hey I just got your message I sent you a message when I get home

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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