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“Helping the poor in Vietnam is everyone’s responsibility. What should students do to help the poor?”

“Helping the poor in Vietnam is everyone’s responsibility. What should students do to help the poor? ” nd3k2
Helping the poor in Vietnam is everyone’s responsibility. Not only adults but young children also need to help the poor. Although students are without money, they can also help in several ways. Firstly, students should join voluntary clubs, charities. In their organizations, they can create many seminars, meeting to make people share the poor. Nowadays, there have been many volunteer clubs of young people. They can support mental instead of material. 1 book, a few breads, a warm shirt, warm blankets also go to the part of their sadness. Student should give them a hand up rather than a hang out. Bring to them love warmth, supporting, friendly handshake and respect them. It is not much but it seems to cure their vulnerable soul. Besides, students can try to help by spreading awareness on how the poor need job opportunities, education and work training so they will be able to make a living and get better day by day. On the other hand, students can teach the poor children how to read an alphabet, and teach them how to learn well. Last but not least, in the situation of the Covid, complex and development nowadays, the students like us can donate, support the old clothes, fast foods, or books for the poor students to prepare for the new school year. This is also a way to bring a loving-heart. Do everything to award, share your love, please become helpful students for society.
Helping the
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in Vietnam is everyone’s responsibility. Not
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young children
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. Although
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are without money, they can
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students
should
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join
voluntary clubs, charities. In their organizations, they can create
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many
seminars, meeting to
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make
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people
share the
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poor
. Nowadays, there have been
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many
volunteer clubs of young
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people
. They can support mental
instead
of material. 1 book, a few breads, a warm shirt, warm blankets
also
go to the part of their sadness.
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Student
should give them a hand up
rather
than a hang out. Bring to them
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love
warmth, supporting, friendly handshake and respect them. It is not much
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but
it seems to cure their vulnerable soul.
Besides
,
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students
can try to
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help
by spreading awareness on how the
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poor
need job opportunities, education and work training
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so
they will be able to
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make
a living and
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get
better day by day.
On the other hand
,
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students
can teach the
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poor
children how to read an alphabet, and teach them how to learn well. Last
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but
not least, in the situation of the
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Covid
, complex and development nowadays, the
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students
like us can donate, support the
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old
clothes,
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fast
foods, or books for the
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poor
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students
to prepare for the new school year. This is
also
a way to bring a loving-heart. Do everything to award, share your
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love
,
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please
become helpful
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students
for society.
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IELTS essay “Helping the poor in Vietnam is everyone’s responsibility. What should students do to help the poor? ”

Essay
  American English
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242 words
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