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Help everyone in the world that needs

Help everyone in the world that needs nVN07
Most of people believe what they cannot help everyone in the world that needs help. Right, in contrast, we should try to help as many people as possible. At least we should only help our communities and countries. However, all of the world don't need to help and i believe it. I think almost one third of the world's population feed themselves. Whatever, none of governments can feed all population so that, richs help to feed populatolion in their states. But i disagree this action. Because everyone helps others who need help. Espicially, nowadays covid-19 has spread around all the world. Because of coronavirus most of people have been out of work. In this situation, people should help together. Then there will be development. For example, during world war 2, the Japanese helped themselves and they handed in all their things to government. That's why they have quickly developed. In conclusion, i understand what if people believe together then they can help others.
Most of
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believe what they cannot
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help
everyone in the
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world
that needs
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help
. Right,
in contrast
, we should try to
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as
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many
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people
as possible. At least we should
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only
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help
our communities and countries.
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,
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all of the
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world
don't need to
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help
and
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i
believe it. I
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almost one third of the world's population feed themselves. Whatever, none of
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governments
can feed all population
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so
that,
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richs
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to feed
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populatolion
in their states.
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But
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i
disagree this action.
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everyone
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others who need
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help
.
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, nowadays
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covid-19
has spread around all the
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.
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of coronavirus most of
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people
have been out of work. In this situation,
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people
should
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help
together. Then there will be development.
For example
, during
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world war 2
, the Japanese
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helped
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themselves and
they handed in all their things to
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government
. That's why they have
quickly
developed.
In conclusion
,
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i
understand what if
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people
believe together then they can
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help
others.
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IELTS essay Help everyone in the world that needs

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
163 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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