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he Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish.

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The preceding data provides information on the Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish. What are the parts that the Salmon get throw? According to what is shown, First of all, Salmons begin their life in eggs called ( Incubation), then the young salmon emerge from the eggs after about 21 days to 4 weeks. Secondly, The young fish which is called ( Freshwater Rearing ) migrate to Rearing areas before going to the ocean. Throw the fish journey in the ocean they grew up and maturation after that it migrates to spawning areas. Finally, they return to the river after an exhausting trip to have some eggs. Overall, Salmons migrate from the river after coming out of the eggs, grow up in the river then migrate to the ocean and return back to the river to have some eggs and to complete the life cycle.
The preceding data provides information on the Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish. What are the parts that the Salmon
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get
throw?

According to what
is shown
,
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First of all
, Salmons
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begin
their life in eggs called
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(
Incubation), then the young salmon emerge from the eggs after about 21 days to 4 weeks.
Secondly
, The young fish which
is called
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(
Freshwater Rearing
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)
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migrate
to Rearing areas
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before
going to the ocean.

Throw the fish journey in the ocean they grew up and maturation after that it
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migrates
to spawning areas.
Finally
, they return to the
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river
after an exhausting trip to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
eggs.

Overall
, Salmons
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migrate
from the
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river
after coming out of the eggs, grow up in the
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river
then
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migrate
to the ocean and
Consider using "return".
return back
to the
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river
to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
eggs and to complete the life cycle.

IELTS essay he Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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