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he Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish.

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The preceding data provides information on the Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish. What are the parts that the Salmon get throw? According to what is shown, First of all, Salmons begin their life in eggs called ( Incubation), then the young salmon emerge from the eggs after about 21 days to 4 weeks. Secondly, The young fish which is called ( Freshwater Rearing ) migrate to Rearing areas before going to the ocean. Throw the fish journey in the ocean they grew up and maturation after that it migrates to spawning areas. Finally, they return to the river after an exhausting trip to have some eggs. Overall, Salmons migrate from the river after coming out of the eggs, grow up in the river then migrate to the ocean and return back to the river to have some eggs and to complete the life cycle.

The preceding data provides information on the Salmons' life cycle from the beginning and the transformation from an egg to an adult fish. What are the parts that the Salmon This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 throw?

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, This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, Salmons This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
begin
 their life in eggs called Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis(
( 
Incubation), then the young salmon emerge from the eggs after about 21 days to 4 weeks. Secondly
, The young fish which is called
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( 
Freshwater RearingDon't put a space before the closing parenthesis)
 )
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekshiftdriftroamimmigrateemigrate
migrate
 to Rearing areas This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 going to the ocean.

Throw the fish journey in the ocean they grew up and maturation after that it You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekshiftdriftroamimmigrateemigrate
migrates
 to spawning areas. Finally
, they return to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtributaryestuarystream
river
 after an exhausting trip to have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 eggs.

Overall
, Salmons You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekshiftdriftroamimmigrateemigrate
migrate
 from the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtributaryestuarystream
river
 after coming out of the eggs, grow up in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtributaryestuarystream
river
 then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekshiftdriftroamimmigrateemigrate
migrate
 to the ocean and Consider using "return".return
return back
 to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtributaryestuarystream
river
 to have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 eggs and to complete the life cycle. 