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having goals; bad or good?

having goals; bad or good? wMlyE
Setting a goal and trying to reach it are completely two separate things. In several nations, many encourage infants that they would have whatever they want in order to be hard work and have perseverance. While there seem to exist some positive consequences of this notion, I would argue that there are numerous potential demerits of it. Convincing children to have commitments to their aims, on the one hand, can make them feel pressured and desperate. When being young, individuals have a distorted view of life and its peaks and throughs. Owing to this fact, they might have chosen some goals which are totally inconceivable. No matter how much they try, their purposes are not attuned with their either ability or situation. In this case, after a while, they would be felt deprecated which brings about many drawbacks. An example could be some elementary students who want to become doctors in the future since as much as they persist on this goal, they can not be prosperous. Encouraging children to pursue their goals just by being industrious is not a smart choice for assisting them. Many, on the other hand, assume cheering the young generation to make their vision come true has great privileges. Not only would it help them to have a purpose in their life but also it shows them how they become successful later. Proponents to this verdict debate children should have learned to set goals and know that even well-known persons did not enjoy early achievement at their young age, yet they reached their goals finally by being committed. From what has been discussed, and in order to draw a conclusion, although having an aim from young ages helps children in some ways, but its minus points surpass its plus points.
Setting a
goal
and trying to reach it are completely two separate things. In several nations,
many
encourage infants that they would have whatever they want in order to be
hard
work and have perseverance. While there seem to exist
some
positive
consequences of this notion, I would argue that there are numerous potential demerits of it.

Convincing
children
to have commitments to their aims, on the one hand, can
make
them feel pressured and desperate. When being
young
, individuals have a distorted view of life and its peaks and
throughs
. Owing to this fact, they might have chosen
some
goals
which are
totally
inconceivable. No matter how much they try, their purposes are not attuned with their either ability or situation.
In this case
, after a while, they would
be felt
deprecated which brings about
many
drawbacks. An example could be
some
elementary students who want to become doctors in the future since as much as they persist on this
goal
, they can not be prosperous. Encouraging
children
to pursue their
goals
just
by being industrious is not a smart choice for assisting them.

Many
,
on the other hand
, assume cheering the
young
generation to
make
their vision
come
true has great privileges. Not
only
would it
help
them to have a purpose in their life
but
also
it
shows
them how they become successful later. Proponents to this verdict debate
children
should have learned to set
goals
and know that even well-known persons did not enjoy early achievement at their
young
age,
yet
they reached their
goals
finally
by
being committed
.

From what has
been discussed
, and in order to draw a conclusion, although having an aim from
young
ages
helps
children
in
some
ways,
but
its minus points surpass its plus points.
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IELTS essay having goals; bad or good?

Essay
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4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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