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The pictures illustrate how the way people accessed a city hospital changed after some developments from 2007 to 2010.

The pictures illustrate how the way people accessed a city hospital changed after some developments from 2007 to 2010. rblon
The pictures illustrate how the way people accessed a city hospital changed after some developments from 2007 to 2010. Overall, it is clear that the road access to this hospital had been urbanized to become far more modern over the 3-year timescale. Especially, the bus station and the staff car park were erected. The most notable change is the appearance of two new roundabouts. The first one was constructed at the three-way junction of the hospital road and the ring road surrounding the hospital, while the second one was located at the four-way intersection of the hospital road and the city road. Over the same period, there was a removal of the 6 bus stops to make way for a new bus station in the west of the road. Another change is that a new public car park was built to the eastern side of the hospital, while the old parking lot became a staff-only are.
The pictures illustrate how the way
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people
accessed a city
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hospital
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changed
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some
developments from 2007 to 2010.

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, it is
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clear
that the
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road
access to this
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hospital
had
been urbanized
to become far more modern over the 3-year timescale.
Especially
, the bus station and the staff car park
were erected
.

The most notable
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change
is the appearance of two new roundabouts. The
first
one
was constructed
at the three-way junction of the
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hospital
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road
and the ring
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road
surrounding the
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hospital
, while the second one
was located
at the four-way intersection of the
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hospital
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road
and the city road.

Over the same period, there was a removal of the 6 bus
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stops
to
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make
way for a new bus station in the west of the
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road
. Another
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change
is that a new public car park
was built
to the eastern side of the
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hospital
, while the
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old
parking lot became a staff-
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only
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IELTS essay The pictures illustrate how the way people accessed a city hospital changed after some developments from 2007 to 2010.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
156 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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