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Have customers moved away from small local shops to shopping malls?

Have customers moved away from small local shops to shopping malls? E3akQ
In the past few years, customers have moved away from shipping at small local shops and shifted to malls and big shopping centers. This essay supports this shift of people towards malls and considers it to be a good development. Firstly, for any purchase, there are more options for customers to choose and purchase from. This puts the power in the customers' hands and pushes businesses’ to provide high-quality goods to win people’s hearts. Recently, when I went to purchase a good hair oil at Forum mall, I was able to compare and choose from five different hair oils, all with top-quality ingredients. In the olden times, this level of selection and quality was not possible. Secondly, malls are a great place to hang out and spend time. The Phoenix mall in Bangalore has Game centers, coffee shops, and sophisticated arenas with live music making it a joyous location to visit with your family and friends. Lastly, malls are advancing and adding more essential shops to attract customers. From jewelry shops to salons, you have everything in one place, making malls great to visit. Instead of visiting 10 different places to get things done, we can get all of it done in a day within the mall. In conclusion, I feel that people moving to malls and bigger shopping centers is a great move for the customers, the businesses and the economy.
In the past few years,
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customers
have
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moved
away from shipping at
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small
local
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shops
and shifted to
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malls
and
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big
shopping centers. This essay supports this shift of
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people
towards
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malls
and considers it to be a
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good
development.

Firstly
, for any
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purchase
, there are more options for
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customers
to choose and
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purchase
from. This puts the power in the customers' hands and pushes businesses’ to provide high-quality
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goods
to win
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people
’s hearts. Recently, when I went to
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purchase
a
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good
hair oil at Forum
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mall
, I was able to compare and choose from five
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different
hair oils, all with top-quality ingredients. In the olden times, this level of selection and quality was not possible.

Secondly
,
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malls
are a great place to hang out and spend time. The Phoenix
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mall
in Bangalore has Game centers, coffee
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shops
, and sophisticated arenas with
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live
music making it a joyous location to visit with your family and friends.

Lastly
,
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malls
are advancing and adding more essential
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shops
to attract
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customers
. From jewelry
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shops
to salons, you have everything in one place, making
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malls
great to visit.
Instead
of visiting 10
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different
places to
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things done, we can
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get
all of it done in a day within the mall.

In conclusion
, I feel that
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people
moving to
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malls
and bigger shopping centers is a great
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move
for the
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customers
, the businesses and the economy.
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IELTS essay Have customers moved away from small local shops to shopping malls?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
232 words
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