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harmful effects of the internet

harmful effects of the internet dly37
Modern life brings about the storm of technology. Nowadays, it seem that people depend more and has become slaves of the Internet. Every morning, when opening their eyes, the first activity of the young people is opening smartphone to check the message, facebook, zalo, instagram, . . . In the meeting, old friends meet again but everyone holds the phone in their hands for surfing web, they just say the something and then re-plug the face to the screen. Invisible, the Internet is splitting and bringing us far apart. We tend to express our status on social networks instead of talking to our loved ones like friends or parents. We are more and more just chasing the shabby, illusion on society that neglect the real precious things besides. We even remember the fan-meeting, know the clothes, the latest trend but can not remember the mother's birthday. Perhaps, the emergence of the Internet has brought us far apart, living out of direction, reality. What a pity!
Modern life brings about the storm of technology. Nowadays, it
seem
that
people
depend
more and has become slaves of the Internet. Every morning, when opening their eyes, the
first
activity of the young
people
is opening smartphone to
check
the message,
facebook
,
zalo
,
instagram
, .
.
.
In the meeting,
old
friends
meet
again
but
everyone holds the phone in their hands for surfing web, they
just
say the something and then re-plug the face to the screen. Invisible, the Internet is splitting and bringing us far apart. We tend to express our status on social networks
instead
of talking to our
loved
ones like friends or parents. We are more and more
just
chasing the shabby, illusion on society that neglect the real precious things
besides
.
We
even remember the fan-meeting, know the clothes, the latest trend
but
can not remember the mother's birthday. Perhaps, the emergence of the Internet has brought us far apart, living out of direction, reality. What a pity!
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IELTS essay harmful effects of the internet

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
165 words
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