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Happy Birthday to a friend

Happy Birthday to a friend pJB3y
Happy Birthday! From the first day I saw you in junior kg to now. We've had some ups and downs but important is we still connect: )having opponent like you always gives me good fight! You were and you will be worthy opponent for me. with whom I have felt that some time lose would be good: ) but when its comes to do support, we've did some incredible things! I just know one thing if Any where we supported to be, there would be no amount of peace exist: ) but its good to be an adult now, I'm realise that we must stop all these things what we have did, all these things looks like non sense, that caused heart broker nothing elseit has to stopped. Just go further, archive your goals. Make everyone proud! in past years what we have done is beyond nonsense but these was some happy memories too! Now, forget all those things that break us just try to remember things that made us happy and kind of good memories too. All Stories have ending then our story should be, from now, never do fights or non sense things, focus on career, focus on your skills, make me proud, nothing else tell me whenever you need me. Hope, you will get what you're looking for: ) I am writting it on 20/July. Because I don't have time after it. I liked you in 8th After that we becomes enemies in 9th, not so good in 10 also. The great things is we never compromised on self respect that why we could able to make bond. The best moment for me is the day I edited your name from astha to chhass for me, you always been chhass for me, amazing memories I don't want be friends again, we never can now we should realise that we are not belongs to be friends and not supposed to be when are different and we just can be friends that I got to know from all these years: ) now with happily or sadly we have to accept it. Being a stranger it would help us. Only way to Secure our relation. just live with these memories it can be hard it's only way to be connected. So whenever you need me just tell I will be there for you whenever, wherever and whatever: ) and if I needs you then you will be there I guess: ) Your not a good friend not neither badMOINRAJ
Happy Birthday! From the
first
day I
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you in junior kg to
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now
. We've had
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some
ups and downs
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but
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important
is we
still
connect:
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having opponent like you always gives me
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good
fight! You were and you will be worthy opponent for me. with whom I have felt that
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some
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time
lose would be
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good
:
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)
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but
when its
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comes
to do support,
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we've did
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some
incredible things! I
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just
know one thing if
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Any where
we supported to be, there would be no amount of peace exist:
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)
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but
its
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good
to be an adult
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, I'm
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realise
that we
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must
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stop
all these things what we have
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, all these things looks like non sense, that caused heart broker nothing
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elseit
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has to
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.
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Just
go
further
, archive your goals.
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Make
everyone proud!
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in
past years what we have done is beyond nonsense
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but
these was
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some
happy
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memories
too!
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Now
, forget all those things that break us
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just
try to remember things that made us happy and kind of
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good
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memories
too. All Stories have ending then our story should be, from
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now
, never do fights or non sense things, focus on career, focus on your
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skills
,
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make
me proud, nothing else
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tell
me whenever you need me. Hope, you will
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get
what you're looking for:
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)
I am
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writting
it on 20/July.
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Because
I don't have time after it. I liked you in 8th After that we
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becomes
enemies in 9th, not
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so
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good
in 10
also
. The great things is we never compromised on
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self respect
that why we
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could able
to
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make
bond. The best moment for me is the day I edited your name from
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astha
to
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chhass
for me, you
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always been
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chhass
for me, amazing
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memories
I don't
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want be
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friends
again, we never can
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now
we should
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realise
that we are not belongs to be
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friends
and not supposed to be when are
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different and
we
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just
can be
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friends
that I
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to know from all these years:
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)
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now
with
happily
or
sadly
we
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have to
accept it. Being a stranger it would
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help
us.
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Only
way to Secure our relation.
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just
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live
with these
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memories
it can be
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hard
it's
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only
way to
be connected
.
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So
whenever you need me
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just
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tell
I will be there for you whenever, wherever and whatever:
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)
and if I
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needs
you then you will be there I guess:
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)
Your not a
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good
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friend
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not neither
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badMOINRAJ
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IELTS essay Happy Birthday to a friend

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
418 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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