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Gvsjajaoowoowoowowi hehwj WEL1a
The number of family members has reduced significantly due to family management, the consequence of this phenomenon affect children's life style. some folks are thinking that joint family is better for kids rather than atomic household. I agree with this statement and this essay will discuss about the b benefit of the joint families and how that affect child behaviour. To commerce, nowadays people are referring to lead atomic families than joint families, consequently, it produce a plethora of problem especially children's lives. Firstly, the family which have numerous number always providing the high security on children. That is, even parents are busy with work, dhara lot of other members are available for watching children. More than that, it also creating more fun moments and babies always busy with their own siblings. Apart from that, join households always is the solution of loneliness, which bonding a great relationship between cousins. For instance, in the evening times of the vacational times children are very pleasant because every member of the family spend time with together and it also spread a positive vibes among the children. When a children brought up with joint family, they should have good communication skills and other human feelings such as love, sad, anger sharing mentally, care such on. Furthermore, every joint families have group elder persons and they have vast amount of knowledge. That is, communication with grandparents providing the knowledge of histories, cultures, human values as well as it also help to improving the aptitude skills imagination skills. For instance, in my country, grandparents explain different type of stories songs, historical events to grandsons and it also generate a curious among the kids, and this lovely conversation how to improve the character and personality of their grandchildren. In conclusion, in my opinion people must try live with joint families because it is providing plenty of benefits especially children and this will make a noticeable difference in children's skills.
The number of
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members has
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reduced
significantly
due to
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family
management, the consequence of this phenomenon affect children's life style.
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some
folks are thinking that
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joint
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family
is better for kids
rather
than atomic household. I
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agree
with this statement and this essay will
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discuss about the
b benefit of the
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joint
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families
and how that affect child
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behaviour
.

To commerce, nowadays
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people
are referring to lead atomic
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families
than
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joint
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families
,
consequently
, it
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produce
a plethora of problem
especially
children's
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lives
.
Firstly
, the
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family
which have numerous number always providing the high security on
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children
.
That is
, even parents are busy with work,
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dhara
lot of other members are available for watching
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children
. More than that, it
also
creating more fun moments and babies always busy with their
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own
siblings. Apart from that,
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join
households always is the solution of loneliness, which bonding a great relationship between cousins.
For instance
, in the evening times of the
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vacational
times
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children
are
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very
pleasant
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because
every member of the
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family
spend time with together and it
also
spread a
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positive
vibes among the children.

When a
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children
brought up with
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joint
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family
, they should have
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good
communication
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skills
and other human feelings such as
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love
, sad, anger sharing mentally, care such on.
Furthermore
, every
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joint
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families
have group elder
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persons and
they have vast amount of knowledge.
That is
, communication with grandparents providing the knowledge of histories, cultures, human values
as well
as it
also
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help
to improving the aptitude
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skills
imagination
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skills
.
For instance
, in my country, grandparents
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explain
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different
type of stories songs, historical
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events
to grandsons and it
also
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generate
a curious among the kids, and this lovely conversation how to
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improve
the character and personality of their grandchildren.

In conclusion
, in my opinion
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people
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must
try
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live
with
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because
it is providing
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plenty
of benefits
especially
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children
and this will
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make
a noticeable difference in children's
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skills
.
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IELTS essay Gvsjajaoowoowoowowi hehwj

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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