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Group and organizations are an important part of some people's live. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reaons and examples to explain your answer. v.1

Group and organizations are an important part of some people's live. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reaons and examples to explain your answer. v. 1
We are living in a world of fashion. Nowadays, most of the people have their of fashion statements and style icons likewise, many people love to wear designer attires to show themselves updated with the fashion world. In my opinion, it is good to wear fashionable clothes depending on the occasions or events that you are attending. If you are having a good fashion sense it will give you more confidence and you will look different. For example, if you are attending a wedding party and you are wearing a unique, fashionable cloth, then everyone will notice that and it will boost your inner confidence. However, I will not suggesting fashionable clothes when you are visiting a temple or a church. At the end, everything depends on your mentality towards wearing designer dresses. If you want to wear designer attires you can wear wherever you want. In my view, When I am wearing trendy and classy dresses it makes me feel different. On the other hand it is not good to wear exposive or revealing clothes because it would be embarrassing. Changes come at a price, There is a chance that most young people will buy expensive clothes and put them into big financial crisis. Therefore, it is important to make sure that you are not leading to a big debt while trying to look attractive. To summarize, It is good to wear fashionable clothes because it can make you the centre of attraction of a party similarly, It will show your social status and prosperity. But, It is important to make sure that you are doing all these depending on your financial status.
We are living in a world of
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fashion
. Nowadays, most of the
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people
have their of
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fashion
statements and style icons
likewise
,
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many
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people
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love
to
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wear
designer attires to
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show
themselves updated with the
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fashion
world.

In my opinion, it is
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good
to
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wear
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fashionable
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clothes
depending on the occasions or
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events
that you are attending. If you are having a
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good
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fashion
sense it will give you more confidence and you will look
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different
.
For example
, if you are attending a wedding party and you are wearing a unique,
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fashionable
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cloth
, then everyone will notice that and it will boost your inner confidence.
However
, I will not
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suggesting
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fashionable
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clothes
when you are visiting a temple or a church.

At the
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end
, everything depends on your mentality towards wearing designer dresses. If you want to
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wear
designer attires you can
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wear
wherever you want. In my view, When I am wearing trendy and classy dresses it
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makes
me feel
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different
.
On the other hand
it is not
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good
to
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wear
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exposive
or revealing
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clothes
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because
it would be embarrassing.

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Changes
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come
at a price, There is a chance that most young
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people
will
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buy
expensive
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clothes
and put them into
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big
financial crisis.
Therefore
, it is
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important
to
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make
sure that you are not leading to a
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big
debt while trying to look attractive.

To summarize
, It is
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good
to
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wear
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fashionable
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clothes
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because
it can
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make
you the
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of attraction of a party
similarly
, It will
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show
your social status and prosperity.
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But
, It is
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important
to
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make
sure that you are doing all these depending on your financial status.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Group and organizations are an important part of some people's live. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reaons and examples to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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