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grange park for ietls task 1

grange park for ietls task 1 leGpJ

The figures illustrates the transformation of a park named Grange in 1920 and today. Starting up with the entrance from Arnold avenue, there were seats and rose garden beside it in the original state. Later, rose garden area is taken by cafe and seats are removed. Initially, there were seats along the sides of the park which is changed into the centre surrounding rose garden today. Glasshouse which is near to the Eldon street is replaced by water feature. There is a new facility of underground car parking on the east side of water feature. Children’s play area takes place at the pond for water plants. Stage for musicians is developed into large amphitheatre for concerts. The central place has a fountain, taking up by rose garden nowadays. Only one area which remains the same is rose garden which is on the northeast part of the park. Overall, various changes occurred during the 21 year period. The new developments of the park provides more entertaining places such as cafe, playgrounds and theatre.

The figures You should probably use "illustrate".illustrate
illustrates
 the transformation of a park named Grange in 1920 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
.

Starting up with the entrance from Arnold avenue, there were seats and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withred
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 beside it in the original state. Later, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withred
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 area is taken
 by 'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"café
cafe
 and seats are removed
. Initially
, there were seats along the sides of the park which is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 into the Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 surrounding You use this word too often, consider replacing it withred
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. Glasshouse which is near to the Eldon street is replaced
 by water feature. There is a new facility of underground car parking on the east side of water feature. Children’s play area takes place at the pond for water plants. Stage for musicians is developed
 into large Possible spelling mistake. 'amphitheatre' is British English.amphitheater
amphitheatre
 for concerts. The central place has a fountain, taking up by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withred
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 nowadays. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
Only
 one area which remains the same is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withred
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 which is on the northeast part of the park.

Overall
, various This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 occurred during the When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "21-year"21-year
21 year
 period. The new developments of the park provides more entertaining places such as 'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"café
cafe
, playgrounds and Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.theater
theatre
. 