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Boys and girls should attend separate schools.To what extend do you agree or disagree with the above statement.

Boys and girls should attend separate schools. with the above statement. MmYjN
Education is important both the gender. In ancient time girls education was not important as boys. Nowadays both boys and girls are equally educated and have equally opportunities in every walk of life. In my perspective, it is beneficial to get education together for boys and girls. To begin with, Coeducation plays significant role in the development of youngsters. To gain qualification with the opposite gender, it increase the confidence among the students. They will improve improves on various sides. They will have better personalities. They will learn to talk with other without afraid. Beside, they have a good attitude and they are able to face the external society in every suitation. To illustrate, They can work together and share their ideas as discussing and solve problems. Furthermore, to study in same schools, it brings equal chance of education for both. They will study in same classroom and attend same lectures. In addition learning under the same schools, boys and girls will learn how to behave politely to each other. For example, in a group discussion they will work as team and develop their ideas. They will get an opportunities to understand each other. In conclusion, boys and girls education under the same learning centre is beneficial for the future growth and development. Studying under same environment will help them to prepare for their coming lives when men and women work together.
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girls
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was not
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as
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. Nowadays both
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educated and have
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opportunities in every walk of life. In my perspective, it is beneficial to
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education
together for
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and girls.

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with, Coeducation plays significant role in the development of youngsters. To gain qualification with the opposite gender, it
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increase
the confidence among the students. They will
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on various sides. They will have better personalities.
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They
will learn to talk with other without afraid. Beside, they have a
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attitude and
they are able to face the external society in every
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. To illustrate, They can work together and share their
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as discussing and solve problems.

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, to study in same schools, it brings equal chance of
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for both. They will study in same classroom and attend same lectures. In
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learning under the same schools,
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and
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will learn how to behave
politely
to each other.
For example
, in a group discussion they will work as team and develop their
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ideas
. They will
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get
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an opportunities
to understand each other.

In conclusion
,
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and
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under the same learning
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them to prepare for their coming
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IELTS essay Boys and girls should attend separate schools. with the above statement.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
232 words
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