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Governments should spend more money on education than sport

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In most education systems around the world, physical education is one of the components of the syllabus. However, this is a controversial topic, as it has been argued that sport as a school subject is unnecessary. Opposing this is the view that physical education is a vital aspect of the education. Physical education was introduced into schools to promote a healthy lifestyle by exposing students to different types of sport and ensuring that those who are not naturally sporty are exposed to exercise and its benefits. For students who are already very active, having a sports lesson might be unnecessary, but those who are not given the opportunities or who are not from active families depend on schools for exercise. Furthermore, a school is supposed to educate on multiple levels, a key aspect of which is healthy living. It is not sufficient to discuss exercise in class; students must experience the effects that ensue. One of these benefits is that exercise enables people to concentrate more efficiently and work more efficiently, meaning that having sport as a subject is beneficial to other subjects as well. On the other hand, exercise to some degree is a personal matter and forcing students to exercise in class can then have the opposite effect. This feeling can lead to students not pursuing any sports later due to negative experiences and memories connected to it. Another argument is that exercise is a leisure activity and therefore not school-related and should be practiced outside of school. In conclusion, while negative results can be caused through physical education, it is vital for students to take part in it. Some students are only exposed to a healthy lifestyle in schools and therefore there is a responsibility to educate individuals in this area.
In most
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systems around the world, physical
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education
is one of the components of the syllabus.
However
, this is a controversial topic, as it has
been argued
that
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sport
as a
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school
subject is unnecessary. Opposing this is the view that physical
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education
is a vital aspect of the education.

Physical
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was introduced
into
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schools
to promote a healthy lifestyle by exposing
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to
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different
types of
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sport
and ensuring that those
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who
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naturally
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are exposed
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exercise
and its benefits. For
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who
are already
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active, having a
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lesson might be unnecessary,
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for
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.
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is supposed
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enables
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people
to concentrate more
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as a subject is beneficial to other subjects
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degree is a personal matter and forcing
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in
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class
can then have the opposite effect. This feeling can lead to
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students
not pursuing any
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sports
later due to
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negative
experiences and memories connected to it. Another argument is that
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exercise
is a leisure activity and
therefore
not school-related and should
be practiced
outside of school.

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, while
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, it is vital for
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and
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there is a responsibility to educate individuals in this area.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on education than sport

Essay
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4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
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