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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.6

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with the statement? v. 6
In this present-day world of technological advancement and globalization, travelling long distances away from home for work or for studies have become a norm, which results in an extensive use of either roads or railways. Therfore, the government has to spend money on developing as well as sustaining these means of commute, but the question remains, whether the government should direct more money towards railways or roads. In my honest opinion, both railways and roads have their own pros and cons and I believe that the government should invariably spend equal proportions of money for both. On one hand, we have railways that is undoubtedly a cheap and ecofriendly means of communication that makes sure the passengers reach their destination without fail throughhout the year in any weather condition. However, trains are not usually safe if one is not very vigiliant of his surrounding as picpocketing in a crowded train is not unheard of. Also, not all trains run on schedule and on that context, some trains are usually late which can cause severe incoviniences for students and workers who are supposed to reach their workplace on time. For instance, the central railways carry thousands of people everyday back and forth from CST to Karjat since early in the morninvg till late at night, but only a few of these trains are on time and some of these trains are often more than twenty minutes late. Thus, it makes sense for govenment to direct a decent amout of money towards railways to increase the frequency of trains and build more tracks, which can result in a profficient crowd control and time management, making travelling more convinient as well as safe for the passengers. On the other hand, private vehicles and cabs have an upper hand when it comes to convinience and comfort of travelling. Nevertheless, over-crowding of vehicles on roads can lead to increased release of fumes and gasses that result in pollution and global-warming, which in unision with broken roads, provides a bumpy ride to the traveller. For example, the roads in Bombay are not only heavily cowded and the traffic jam may end up requiring upto half an hour to clear up, but also have serious pothole issues which can damage the vehicle and result in a rough ride. Therfore, it makes sense for government to spend a similiar amout of money in repairing and maintaining roads as well as to construct more roadways and bridges with a broad corridor to efficiently manage the traffic and consequently, pollution. Taken together, I would like to conclude by saying that the government should carefully think and plan out a developement and sustainable upgrade for both railways and roads to avoid the overwhelming consequences of untreated and unmanaged conditions, while savouring the fruits of either means of communication
In this present-day world of technological advancement and globalization, travelling long distances away from home for work or for studies have become a norm, which
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results
in an extensive
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use
of either
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roads
or
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railways
.
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Therfore
, the
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government
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has to
spend
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money
on developing
as well
as sustaining these means of commute,
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but
the question remains, whether the
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government
should direct more
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money
towards
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railways
or
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roads
. In my honest opinion, both
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railways
and
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roads
have their
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own
pros and cons and I believe that the
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government
should
invariably
spend equal proportions of
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money
for both.

On one hand, we have
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railways
that is
undoubtedly
a
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cheap
and
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ecofriendly
means of communication that
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makes
sure the passengers reach their destination without fail
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throughhout
the year in any weather condition.
However
,
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trains
are not
usually
safe if one is not
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very
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vigiliant
of his surrounding as
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picpocketing
in a crowded
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train
is not unheard of.
Also
, not all
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trains
run on schedule and on that context,
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some
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trains
are
usually
late which can cause severe
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incoviniences
for students and workers who
are supposed
to reach their workplace on time.
For instance
, the central
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railways
carry thousands of
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people
everyday back and forth from CST to
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Karjat
since early in the
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morninvg
till late at night,
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but
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only
a few of these
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trains
are on time and
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some
of these
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trains
are
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often
more than twenty minutes late.
Thus
, it
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makes
sense for
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govenment
to direct a decent
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amout
of
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money
towards
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railways
to increase the frequency of
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trains
and build more
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tracks
, which can
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result
in a
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profficient
crowd control and time management, making travelling more
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convinient
as well
as safe for the passengers.

On the other hand
, private vehicles and cabs have an upper hand when it
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comes
to
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convinience
and comfort of travelling.
Nevertheless
, over-crowding of vehicles on
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roads
can lead to increased release of fumes and gasses that
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result
in pollution and global-warming, which in
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unision
with broken
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roads
, provides a bumpy ride to the
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traveller
.
For example
, the
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roads
in Bombay are not
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only
heavily
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cowded
and the traffic jam may
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end
up requiring
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upto
half an hour to
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clear
up,
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but
also
have serious pothole issues which can damage the vehicle and
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result
in a rough ride.
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Therfore
, it
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makes
sense for
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government
to spend a
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similiar
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amout
of
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money
in repairing and maintaining
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roads
as well
as to construct more roadways and bridges with a broad corridor to
efficiently
manage the traffic and
consequently
, pollution.

Taken together, I would like
to conclude
by saying that the
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government
should
carefully
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think
and plan out a
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developement
and sustainable upgrade for both
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railways
and
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roads
to avoid the overwhelming consequences of untreated and unmanaged conditions, while
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savouring
the fruits of either means of communication
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with the statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
466 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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