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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.26

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 26
It is irrefutable that transportation is the lifeline of any country. Some people believe that authorities allocate more funds in railways instead of roads. I tend to agree with statement as using public transport is more affordable and reduces congestion. First and foremost, extending railway system means a lesser vehicle on the road. The construction of metro rail will help in getting rid of on road traffic, allowing people to reach places on time. For example, in a recent survey, the most congested cities around the world are Bangalore and Mumbai, and none of them have a great infrastructure for public transportation. As a consequence, people are stuck with taking taxi's. In contrast, Delhi, has an extended railway and is considered far better in terms of traffic. Another compelling advantage of railways is the cost. Railway around the world have been electrified and no more runs on fuel, which has mostly the cost of travelling, a lot more economical. To illustrate this, the cost of travelling by trains is less than $0. 25 per mile. While, it's above $1. 0 per mile by transit buses. As a result, people have started using subways, way more often than other. Also, investing in the subways will be cheaper for government as well, as this is one time investment and will only need maintenance. In contrast to roads, which needs a renewal every alternate year. In conclusion, despite roads being the primary source of transportation, since the ancient time. In my opinion, railways are the way to look forward as they take less time and are not heavy on the pocket.
It is irrefutable that transportation is the lifeline of any country.
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Some
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people
believe that authorities allocate more funds in
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railways
instead
of
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roads
. I tend to
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agree
with statement as using public transport is more affordable and
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reduces
congestion.

First
and foremost, extending
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railway
system means a lesser vehicle on the
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road
. The construction of metro rail will
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help
in getting rid of on
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road
traffic, allowing
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people
to reach places on
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time
.
For example
, in a recent survey, the most congested cities around the world are Bangalore and Mumbai, and none of them have a great infrastructure for public transportation. As a consequence,
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people
are stuck
with taking taxi's.
In contrast
, Delhi, has an extended
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railway
and
is considered
far better in terms of traffic.

Another compelling advantage of
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railways
is the cost.
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Railway
around the world have
been electrified
and no more runs on fuel, which has
mostly
the cost of travelling, a lot more economical. To illustrate this, the cost of travelling by trains is less than $0. 25 per mile.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
, it's above $1. 0 per mile by transit buses.
As a result
,
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people
have
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started
using subways, way more
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often
than other.
Also
, investing in the subways will be cheaper for
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government
as well
, as this is one
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time
investment and will
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only
need maintenance.
In contrast
to
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roads
, which needs a renewal every alternate year.

In conclusion
, despite
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roads
being the primary source of transportation, since the ancient
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time
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
my opinion,
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railways
are the way to look forward as they take less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and are not heavy on the pocket.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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